Independent TPO 44
Nowadays, parents spend less time with their children as they are busier. The controversial question is that how they can spend the rest of their time with them. In my opinion, if they do activities such as doing sports or playing games, it would be so useful for children.
Although I believe that students need their parent’s support for school-work, it seems that children would not enjoy it very much. In fact, if parents decide to spend their leisure time for helping their children with school activities, their role shift to a teacher. It would have a bad influence on children’s minds. For example, my cousin is 8 years old. His parents try to help him in school-work. Although the result shows that he is a good student, his relation is formal with his parents. In fact, he does not have a friendly relationship with them. He always complains that he has a second school in the house.
Second, children try to find different ways to have a deep connection with parents. Activities such as playing games are funny and energetic, which attracts kids. So if parents do such an activities, they would make a good relationship with their children. Also, children like to talk about these stuff with their friends. For instance, one time I want to bring back my little sister from the school. She told me that today one of my friends talked about going to the picnic with her parents and they played a lot. Her big question was that why we do not go out like my friend. She said I like to come and explain these stuff for my friends. Therefore, making good relation with children, would increase their confidence among their friends and make them more social.
Third, technology is going to replace everything in the society include relationships. If children not having fun with their parents, they would prefer to spend this time with cell-phones or tablets. So it is better that parents provide fun activities to keep them away. Psychologists believe that working a lot with these devices might destroy children’s creativity. Besides, playing games even help children to learn their school works better. Sometimes, parents can even help them doing homework as a game, which is so helpful.
Considering the arguments in favor and contrast of the sufficient behavior with students, I personally prefer to do fun activities with my kids.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an activity' or simply 'activities'?
Suggestion: an activity; activities
...ch attracts kids. So if parents do such an activities, they would make a good relationship wi...
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Line 7, column 490, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to do' or 'do'.
Suggestion: to do; do
.... Sometimes, parents can even help them doing homework as a game, which is so helpful...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, second, so, therefore, third, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9102244389 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70066408179 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498753117207 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7319622168 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.9259259259 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8518518519 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96296296296 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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