do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Everything is connected. As the story of a butterfly and a storm indicates, events happening elsewhere, though far away from where you are, is possible to affect your daily life. This renders it essential to keep an eye on what is going on around the world.
As I argued above, I will include incidents happening in other places into the consideration of my future plan, and I assume most people do as well. Being a prospective PhD student, I am concerned of the security and stability overseas. So I paid close attention to recent terrorist attacks and ethnic conflicts in the United States and other countries. If the situation had become out of control, I would give up my plan to apply for universities in certain areas or countries. Other people may also take into account events happening around the world when making investment, career or travel plans. Therefore, it is indeed important to know what is going on although it seems not to influence your daily life now.
Besides, being acknowledged of the events happening in other places help to widen our horizon and deepen our understanding of the world. We only stay in a very limited area through our life, not being able to experience the richness of the whole world on our own. If we keep track of what is going on, we will be able to learn about different culture, different political institutions, different structure of society, and most importantly, different way of living. For example, when I am working hard to attend exams, some young people of my age quit university and start their own business; when the majority of graduates are fighting for a well-paid job, a small group of them choose to go to the west China to teach primary students. It is knowing what is happening elsewhere that we could see the broadness of the world and life. This frees us from our daily routine, boring and limited.
To put it in a nutshell, knowing about the events happening elsewhere help us to make future plans and increase our understanding of the world and life itself. We have every reason to do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb know is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'knows'
Suggestion: knows
...est China to teach primary students. It is knowing what is happening elsewhere that we cou...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...est China to teach primary students. It is knowing what is happening elsewhere that we cou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71468144044 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69404218157 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562326869806 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2439090479 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.117647059 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239464347423 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073777697569 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688461640595 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16309844804 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379747762436 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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