Mobile phones are turning into important companions for human beings. Like smoking, the use of the mobile phone can also be considered as a bad habit, since this erodes our social moments. So, I agree with the statement that Mobile phones are needed to be banned in certain places. I will show my logics in below paragraphs for the justification.
At first, we need to understand the hazardous impact of the cell phone usage. Today, mobile devices are equipped with some numerous applications and addictive features. For example, recently a research article from a science journal shows that during watching multimedia in mobile phones, our Brain reacts exactly in the same pattern when people use narcotics.Therefore, this proves that Mobile phone usage can be addictive as smoking. This is a critical warning for the ignorant people when we know the harmful effect of smoking on our health.
Now, we can understand the reason for terming the use of the Mobile phone as anti-social. As we have seen mobile phone overuse can be harmful to our mental health naturally this addiction will cause more reduction of our social moments. In fact, when a person is pre-occupied with Mobile phone, his focus from his work will be lost and also he may lose interest in other things, which can be important for his friend or family members. Therefore, for the betterment of society, use of mobile phone can be restricted in certain places or social gatherings.
Lastly, mobile phone technology was developed to ease our burden in communication. Now, with the addition of Internet, our expectations from a mobile phone have skyrocketed. But, we need to understand the consequences of these unrealistic expectations.
Therefore, I strongly agree that like the smoking mobile phone should be banned in some certain places.
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The lower mark because of :
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Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52861952862 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
they are not outstanding. most likely the third paragraph is somehow duplicated to the second paragraph.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore
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...use of the Mobile phone as anti-social. As we have seen mobile phone overuse can b...
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, may, so, therefore, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11447811448 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99515341977 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52861952862 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4750299577 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.266666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380751123536 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151062566752 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104141208003 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273428825271 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829822501941 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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