All About of Money
Humanity articulated that money is needed. Money is a tool that people usually use to get thing or service in their life. If we do not have money, we can do anything. At now, our activities in our life need money. But in the past was different, when we did not have money, we still can live. We can see in Ancient Era, people that live in that era do not know about money but they still can survive in their life. If we learn about history, we know that they can stand in their live because they use barter way. Different with in Modern Era, we need money, almost in every our activities. People usually have to work to obtain money to fulfill our requirement. But people sometimes have to debt to Bank to fulfill their necessary. Discuss both of them will show this.
Firstly, several people said that debt to Bank is the best choice to obtain money. I am sometimes agrees with that statement but I am disagrees with that statement some of the time. First, I agree with that statement is a specific case. When we need money immediately because there is urgent necessary in our life, for example there was an accident that happened with our family but there is nobody helping us and we do not have enough money to pay his administration, I think that debt to Bank is the best choice. But in other situation about my disagrees, we must know that if we want to debt to Bank, we have to give some warranties to that Bank, such as land certificate, ID card, and wage document in our company. Not only we give some guaranties but also we have to pay rate of interest too when we pay our debt.
Secondly, I want to discuss about job to get money. Job is very important for several people. If we do not have a job, we cannot get money. We can see around us, many people are competing to get a good job because some people believe that if we get it, we will have a lot of money. Besides that, we need to have a job to still alive. Because we know that to get some food, to pay electricity, to buy something, we have to use money.
There are many advantages and disadvantages both of them to obtain money. First, when we want to debt to Bank, the advantage is we can get money fast. The disadvantage one is when we cannot pay our debt with rate of interest in precise time. It can become really creepy because the bank will take our warranties and we will be always in the difficult situation because debt collector will find us until we can pay our debt. We have to know that to obtain money from Bank, we have to have persistent job too. So, if we do not have a job, I think that is impossible to get money from Bank. Impression with that statement, I think that looking for a job is the best answer and there is not any disadvantage from it. If we have a job, we can get money from our job and we can debt to Bank when the money that we need cannot fulfill our necessary.
In summary, some people have many ways to fulfill our needed. We can get money from our job or debt to Bank is depending on our self. We have to responsible about our consequences because we choose that choice by our self.
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