1.1. The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
The note mentions that according to the identical family root with aspirin and steady decline of reported headache by the study group in Mentia for the sake of using the salicylates in the food industry, salicylates can be considered as the painkiller for headache. In addition, there is a prediction that based on the current exploration about the possible usage of salicylates as a flavor in the food industry, the number of denizens of Mentia suffering the headache will continue to decrease. This conclusion and its supporting clues cannot be accepted as it stands since it relies on some vague pieces of evidence and requires further explanation. The following paragraphs will list these ambiguities and required evidence and discerption.
The first shaky evidence of the note which used to depict that salicylates is a painkiller is the possessing the same family with aspirin which is an analgesic. Owning the identical family cannot be guaranteed for having the identical properties since the different atomic arrangements lead to various types of characteristics in materials; for instance, the various type of atomic arrangement of carbon lead to the formation of graphic and diamond which are completely two separated materials with contradicted features. Therefore, this clue requires further substantial rearing evidence about the properties of salicylates to give the credits to this substance as a painkiller. Otherwise, a holistic sentence about a similar family root cannot be a cogent reason for owning the same feature as aspirin.
The second skeptical part of the note is about the discussed study which has been conducted during the twenty years. As long as, there is no comprehensive information about this study and its research method there is a list of crux concerns, such as the scope of case studies, the accuracy of the case studies as the public indication, or lifestyle of this group during the study, which doubts the validity of this study. For example, if the last concern which is about the lifestyle of samples is considered for further evaluation, there should be concrete pieces of evidence about the daily diet, amount of intake salicylates by this group, the level of pain before and after consumption of salicylates until there will be adherence reason for representing the effectiveness of this substance as the analgesic. Thus, the consideration of unclear about details and prolonged study as a reason for the treatable feature of salicylates is doubtful.
Finally, with conditional acceptance of the analgesic feature for salicylates, the prediction which is done in the conclusion section cannot be verified for two main reasons. This first reason is the lack of evidence about salicylates as the flavor will have the identical feature as it has as a preservative; since there is a probability that for the sake of combination with other ingredients of food faces the alteration in the property; consequently, it will not have the previous treatable feature. The second reason is about lack of information about the intake dose of salicylate; since there is a possibility of the additive usage of this substance in the food industry will overpass in its intake limit and leads to other severe health issues.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and evidence explicitly depict
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 536 350
No. of Characters: 2752 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.812 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.134 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.915 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 124 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 85 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.704 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 16.3942115768 189% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2799.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 536.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22201492537 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99066116701 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432835820896 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 922.5 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5559186746 57.8364921388 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.9375 119.503703932 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5 23.324526521 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11760682777 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494654651747 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525264339556 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0704942763919 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620198657378 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.3550499002 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 98.500998004 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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