In 1975 a wildlife census found that there were seven species of amphibians in Xanadu National Park with abundant numbers of each species However in 2002 only four species of amphibians were observed in the park and the numbers of each species were drasti | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In 1975 a wildlife census found that there were seven species of amphibians in Xanadu National Park, with abundant numbers of each species. However, in 2002 only four species of amphibians were observed in the park, and the numbers of each species were drastically reduced. There has been a substantial decline in the numbers of amphibians worldwide, and global pollution of water and air is clearly implicated. The decline of amphibians in Xanadu National Park, however, almost certainly has a different cause: in 1975, trout which are known to eat amphibian eggs were introduced into the park.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In the argument, the author concludes that the primary reason for the decrease in amphibians is the presence of trout in the National Park in 1975. The editor comes to this conclusion based on several premises, which, if correct, could indicate that the argument holds water. As it stands now, however, the mentioned implications from the editor of the magazine rest on three unwarranted assumptions that hinder the credibility of the argument.
First of all, the author assumes that the 1975 census was conducted scientifically. But this might not be the case. Perhaps it was done by some junior students whose final scores were not at all dependent on this census, and in turn, they did not put in enough effort to conduct it well. In addition, it is possible that, at the time, there was not enough experienced scholars in this filed to create a well-designed research with regards to the depletion of amphibians. If either scenario above proves true, the author’s argument that trout plays the prominent role in the disappearance of amphibians is not persuasive.
Moreover, the editor presumes that a species being observable is indicative of its numbers. For example, if we cannot spot many number of amphibians at a specific time of the year, the reason might underlie in that time of the year; amphibians hiding somewhere else. Or even they could be foraging in places that are hard to go and examine whether some of them could be found or not. If it is true that not being truly visible inevitably does not amount to the depletion of that species, then the author’s contention is significantly hampered.
Finally, the author makes the assumption that the trout and amphibians lived in the same environment in the National Park. Conceivably, there is a chance that these two species are separated in order to preserve the amphibians from the trout, since they are said to be the prayer of amphibians eggs. In addition to this, the introduction of trout in 1975 could be only one of the many other factors of the diminishing numbers of amphibian, like birds or other animals. If that proves correct, then the editor’s argument is not overly compelling.
To conclude, although the central claim of the author might be convincing, indicating the only reasons of the amphibians decline is the introduction of trout is not correct. And the author needs consider the above three alternate explanations if he/she hopes to bolster its persuasiveness.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 401, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'well-designed research'.
Suggestion: well-designed research
...ienced scholars in this filed to create a well-designed research with regards to the depletion of amphib...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'many numbers'.
Suggestion: many numbers
...numbers. For example, if we cannot spot many number of amphibians at a specific time of the...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example, in addition, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9902676399 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.845375774 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513381995134 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5686253957 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.944444444 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178297745871 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515346508347 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506504564147 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919031181366 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516253680608 0.0628817314937 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example, in addition, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments