In order to increase milk production, some farmers in Jalikistan region started use of a hormone that was designed to produce larger cows thus increasing milk production. It was observed that the childhood obesity increased by 200% in jalikistan and author suggests reason for this is the hormone used, because milk consumption has not increased or decresed and children who are lactose intolerant donot show same increase in obesity. There could be various other reasons for increase in obesity.
It is possible that increased number of children are suffering from childhood obesity because of recent change in diet. It is possible that the people of Jalikstan have started to consume more amount of fatty food thus resulting in incresed obesity. All aspects of their life must be anlysed. Another possibility could be decrease in physical activity of children. This lack of physical activity could result in buildup of fat in children. Fat might be less in almold milk or soy milk compared to cow milk, so they demonstrate less obesity compared to children who drink cow milk.
We are only given increase in percentages, and percentages can belie the data. It is possible that earlier only one in ten thousand suffered from childhood obesity while now 3 in ten thousand are suffering from obesity. This may be considered minor aberration as sample size is very large and number are not serious as it is presented to be. This difference may be due to genetics or many other factor. Earlier obesity percentage in children was 0.01 and now it's just 0.03, still percentage increase is 200%. Also it says that children who are lactose intolerant donot have same per increase in obesity. It could be higher or marginally lower, we do not know. It may be 180% increase which would show that there is overall increase in obesity and that obesity has not incresed beause of hormone given to cows.
There are various reasons for increase in childhood obesity: it could be because of increased fatty food , lack of physical activity in children, minor aberration in data or could be a general increase in obesity overall. So we must analyse various possibilities before we assume that increase in obesity is because of hormones used to increase milk production.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1842 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.886 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.586 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.993 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... not increased or decresed and children who are lactose intolerant donot show same incr...
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Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
....03, still percentage increase is 200%. Also it says that children who are lactose i...
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Line 5, column 537, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ase is 200%. Also it says that children who are lactose intolerant donot have same per ...
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...could be because of increased fatty food , lack of physical activity in children, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, still, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00265251989 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6393155163 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456233421751 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.0453911805 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2631578947 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.94736842105 5.70786347227 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22224304265 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702750308148 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747469109772 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152332932565 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698372937943 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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