It has been suggested that goverments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military. I disagree with this statement and believe that military investment is vital for survival of nation while art is doing fine without goverment funding. This essay will first present view on importance of military investment and then talk about why investment in art must not be high.
All goverments in the world are worried about their national security from threats within and outside the coutry. All nations have invested sizable portion of their economy into the development of the armed forces. USA in largest spender in terms to money. It has one the strongest military in the world. It spends trillions of dollars in develpoment on new technology with has made USA superpower. This army has been constantly involved in one conflict after another in order to protect its national interest and maintain its domination over the world. Investment in military have great benefits: investment made by US Airforce in development of CNC machines has revolutionised manufacturing, development of Jet engines was done by the US Airforce. There are such developments that have made out lives easiler today. This wars and technology development are expensive and require goverment funding. Security of the nation cannot be trusted in private hands.
I do not think there will be any country that has invested more money in art compared to its military. Art is often seen as iteam of luxury and if goverment spends money in acquiring or promoting art it will always be frowned upon by the public. Goverment has no use of art.This has kept goverment investment in the arts limited to few national awards and development of few universities that teach art. While people may argue that art is very important, it has no direct impact on day to day life of its citisens. Art has been greatly funded by private donations. Artist sell there work at various platform and make money. Goverment involvment in art is not required. On other hand, military cannot be controlled by private parties and hence goverment spends huge amount of money in mordernisations and upkeep of army.
Goverment should definetly spend more money on armed forces compared to art because they are responsible for defending nation against external threats, important for development of technology and army cannot be controlled by private parties. While goverment must encourage art, its funding should be limited as it's importance is low comapred to Technology, economy and Agriculture. Art is luxury and not a necessity. So, goverment funding on military must always be higher than goverment funding of art.
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...he development of the armed forces. USA in largest spender in terms to money. It has one t...
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...that have made out lives easiler today. This wars and technology development are exp...
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...the public. Goverment has no use of art.This has kept goverment investment in the ar...
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...overment investment in the arts limited to few national awards and development of ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2239.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10022779043 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79507679202 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492027334852 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.14753562 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.56 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.56 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.52 5.21951772744 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145443884875 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483728252923 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541170722851 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110418499544 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505862667085 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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