48. The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement. "Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this argument, the author concludes that Clearview is a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. To bolster the argument, the author points out that the house price has fallen in Clearview, and there will be new programs as well as excellent health care. However, unless the author provides more convincing evidence to back the argument, it does not hold water.
First, the author mentions that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. However, the author fails to provide any evidence to support the assumption. Perhaps, housing price in region near Clearview is much higher than other region of the country like 200%，because of convenient transportation, beautiful landscape and consistent climate. Thus, although the price decreased significantly last year, it may be still much more expensive than the average estate price of the state. Therefore, to back the assumption, the author should provide more information about the original housing price of this region near Clearview.
Second, the statement that Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services is unjustifiable. It is likely that the mayor just put off their plans or present the splendid words that help them to be a will-be leader, but whether those new programs like schools, streets and public services will be built or not is uncertain. Thus, without additional information of whether those programs will be built, it is difficult to access the merit of the statement.
Third, the author indicates that because the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average, there is excellent health care in Clearview. But the implication is unwarranted. If those physicians are all gynecologists or pediatricians who are although physicians, major in giving birth or children, cannot help the health care of elderly citizens. In conclusion, in order to better bolster the recommendation, I would need more detailed information involving what those physicians are exactly for.
In a nutshell, the argument is unconvincing as it relies on several indefensible assumptions. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been more logically acceptable.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1908 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.213 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.784 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.754 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'seeks'.
Suggestion: seeks
...at Clearview is a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. To bolster the argum...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, still, therefore, third, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 365.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4301369863 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94075611668 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539726027397 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6953910296 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.588235294 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166318417929 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523523774501 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075898168998 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792679531626 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603302841405 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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