[67] The following is a letter to the editor of the Waymarsh Times.
Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a state traffic
survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute
now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed. Members of the town
council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as
being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential
neighborhoods. It would be better to follow the example of the nearby city of Garville. Last year
Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them
coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was
implemented, and people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably.
There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The notion that the government in Waymarsh should implement a policy as Garville that encourages people to share ride to solve a traffic problem seems at first glance to be an obvious recommendation. After all, this policy can work in Garvill. However, a careful examination will find how groundless this is, for the evidence is insufficient.
Firstly, the premise upon which the whole argument rests is the claim that the traffic times have rised in three years in Waymarsh. However, the only evidence the arguer submits about past commute times is a state traffic survey. There is no specific information about where and how was the survey conducted. We can’t tell the statistic includes the specific statistic of Waymarsh or is a general state data which is dubious to apply to Waymarsh directly for there is no more background statistics about the Waymarsh and the overall state.
Additionally, the survey which just completed now to be the contrast of three years ago and support the claim that traffic times rise is also uninformative. The arguer doesn’t offer any evidence to buttress its validity, thus, the research is not plausible enough. For example, maybe the survey is a college student's homework which research method is dubious. The researcher may only asked people live in city center, however, the traffics in most part of Waymarsh are great in fact. Also, the research region might be different to the state survey, hence the outcome can’t be contrast directly. We just don't know.
Furthermore, the reasoning line between a policy works in Garvill and this same policy would function in Waymarsh is unsound. The arguer doesn't offer more pieces of evident about the two cities' circumstances and demographics. Thus, we can't not jump to the conclusion that identical policy can be implemented properly at different places.
To sum up, this recommendation is not persuasive for the locking of evidence. The arguer requires to give more pieces of support about the survey's validity and the two city's basic information to make the recommendation more cogent.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ome can’t be contrast directly. We just dont know. Furthermore, the reasoning li...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...tion in Waymarsh is unsound. The arguer doesnt offer more pieces of evident about the ...
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Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ircumstances and demographics. Thus, we cant not jump to the conclusion that identic...
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Line 9, column 99, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'giving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: giving
...ocking of evidence. The arguer requires to give more pieces of support about the survey...
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Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'surveys'' or 'survey's'?
Suggestion: surveys'; survey's
...o give more pieces of support about the surveys validity and the two citys basic inform...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, after all, for example, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15294117647 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76777676761 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535294117647 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9053002758 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220654653177 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651930612987 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699621961126 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10717849526 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826065275966 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 605, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ome can’t be contrast directly. We just dont know. Furthermore, the reasoning li...
^^^^
Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...tion in Waymarsh is unsound. The arguer doesnt offer more pieces of evident about the ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ircumstances and demographics. Thus, we cant not jump to the conclusion that identic...
^^^^
Line 9, column 99, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'giving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: giving
...ocking of evidence. The arguer requires to give more pieces of support about the survey...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'surveys'' or 'survey's'?
Suggestion: surveys'; survey's
...o give more pieces of support about the surveys validity and the two citys basic inform...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, after all, for example, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15294117647 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76777676761 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535294117647 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9053002758 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220654653177 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651930612987 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699621961126 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10717849526 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826065275966 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.