92 Collegevil store
In this argument, the author concludes that Monarch Books had better open its own in-store café mainly considering that its rival Book and Bean maybe will compete for a limited pool of potential customers in Collegeville. To support this conclusion, the author points out that Monarch Books is supposed to change the space for children’s books into a café due to the dramatic decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Some evidence should be afforded to evaluate that opening in-store café is a good choice for Monarch Books.
A threshold problem with the argument involves that the author assumes Book and Bean will definitely open a Collegeville store, but in fact it is an unsubstantiated assumption because it just announced its intention to open one and nobody is sure about whether it will open one or not and when to open a branch shop in Collegeville. Nobody can exclude the possibility that Book and Bean just released this news on the social media and publicized it, in the hope of getting some response from the potential consumers. For instance, if the people in Collegeville prefer the new style book store combined with a café, which means Book and Bean tend to enjoy a great popularity there, it will certainly open a branch there sooner or later and vice versa. To convince readers that Monarch Books should clean an area for its own café, the author must provide clear evidence that Book and Bean will definitely open there in the future.
Even if Book and Bean’s Collegeville comes into being in the future, the author also overlooks a myriad of crucial factors. The author demonstrates that a significantly decline in the percentage of the population under age ten can results in a decline in children’s books’ sales, so there is no need for children’s books in Monarch Books. However, the author fails to provide any evidence to support this assumption. According to national census data, the percentage of young children drops dramatically, but it just tells the tendency nationwide. Perhaps the Collegevil
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 164, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('significantly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decline') instead of another adjective.
...l factors. The author demonstrates that a significantly decline in the percentage of the population und...
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Line 6, column 242, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...age of the population under age ten can results in a decline in children's books&a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 342.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22514619883 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35513670467 2.78398813304 121% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.2624698702 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.916666667 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0621355204425 0.218282227539 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417442018484 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721758675917 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0447128466161 0.128457276422 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0115203555169 0.0628817314937 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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