Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Arts play an important role in a country's development and are in need of governments' sponsorship. However, compared with arts, athletics are of greater significance in a country's development. From my point of view, the government should be highly recommended to spend money on athletics, especially Olympic teams.
Reasons abound for my suggestions. Firstly, for some extremely poor countries, sponsoring athletic will gain short-term easier. For some African countries, their government revenue is quite constrained. Therefore, they need some quick paybacks. As we know, African people adept at long distance racing in Olympic games. The winners of ten thousand-meter-race are always born in Africa. So, if these governments take the advantages of their people, investing on state-sponsored Olympic teams, the good results can be seen pretty soon.
Meanwhile, sometimes sports can contribute to rise national reputation, which can hardly achieve by art. Let us take the Olympic games as an example. This wordwide sport games have more one hundred countries to join in. Its participants include some extremelly developed areas, such as the north America and the European Union. Apart from that, some underdeveloped countries are also equipped with the equal chances to compete with rich countries. They have golden opportuinities to show their strength. If a athletic from a poor country beat others and eventually win the gold medal, the whole world will keep this poor country in mind and its national awareness will be rised.
In addition, arts consist of various parts, including literature, painting, pilosophy and so on. But I don't think it is really easy to choose a specific area to sponsor. It is time consuming to do research about which fields are the main targets. Also, sponsoring art dates back to Renaissance. Some Italian artists are sposored by dukes or loyal familys. As time goes by, the artists are growing more independent in the sense that they refuse to let their works adversely affected or controlled by their sponsors' opinions. Nowadays, this trend is still going on. If government sponsor some arts, the artist might lose independent ways to express their own ideology and opinions.
In a nutshell, sponsoring athletic will bring short-term consequenses and rise the reputation all around the word. And sponsoring art do harm to artists' independent creativity. Personally, I firmly believe that sponsoring sports will be a better choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, really, so, still, therefore, while, apart from, in addition, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38402061856 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98855626361 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621134020619 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3140356291 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6071428571 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8571428571 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160686988659 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401061798133 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314043351393 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935590205688 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279853986019 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.33 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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