On Balmer Island where mopeds serve as a
In this argument the author concludes that limiting the number of rental mopeds will give to a decline annual reduction in mope accidents. To support this conclusion, the author points out that it is an experience learned from Seaville and the increasingly more population in summer will cause more mopeds accidents. It is easy to understand that the author is eager to cut the accidents of mopeds around the year, but it is fraught with dubious assumptions that another town's success may not happen at Balmer Island again. So the author's argument is problematic in several respects,rendering the argument unconvincing as it stands.
A threshold problem with the argument involves reducing the number of rental mopeds during summer may not be decrease the number of accidents on the road. The writer fails to offer any evidence to support this assumption. Perhaps strict traffic rules are followed by all moped drivers and the roads are flat and wide, preventing some crush. Although the people are increasing during summer, we are not sure whether the accidents will occur more. Given these possible scenarios, that fact the cutting down the number of rental mopeds during summer vacation lends no support to the argument. In order to better rate the recommendation, I would need more information involving other prospects about moped drivers and the traffic rules.
In addition, the author demonstrates that this approach must be helpful because Seaville has attained 50% annual reduction in mopeds accidents with the same policy since last year. Yet, the author provides no evidence to support the assumption. Nobody can exclude the possibility that some other reasons are accountable for the reduction. For example, during last year, Seaville might ask more traffic police officers to arrange the traffic during rush hours and improve the traffic rules to protect pedestrians. To reinforce the argument, the author would have to offer more assurances about the relationships between the reduction of mopeds accidents and the fewer rental mopeds during lat summer in Seaville.
Finally, the author shed light upon the opinion that only implementing this policy in summer will meet a lot. Absent evidence to the contrary, it is quite possible that more mopeds accidents will occur during the winter time, especially after a snowy day when all the roads are frozen. To convince me that reducing the number of rental mopeds only in summer time will be helpful, the author must give clear evidence that a large part of the accidents do happen during summer because of some related reasons like spike of population.
In a nutshell, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To better assess the strength of each of the author's three unwarranted claims, respectively, I would need to know the number of rental mopeds on the road every year, the comparison with Seaville and the accidents' distribution whole year round.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 479 350
No. of Characters: 2428 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.069 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.563 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.058 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.35 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: EAGER_TO[1]
Message: With 'eager to', use the base form of the verb: 'cut'.
Suggestion: cut
... understand that the author is eager to cut the accidents of mopeds around the year...
^^^
Line 1, column 472, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
...t with dubious assumptions that another towns success may not happen at Balmer Island...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 532, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t happen at Balmer Island again. So the authors argument is problematic in several resp...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 583, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , rendering
...ument is problematic in several respects,rendering the argument unconvincing as it stands....
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 379, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... For example, during last year, Seaville might ask more traffic police officers t...
^^
Line 13, column 352, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ing the number of rental mopeds only in summer time will be helpful, the author must give c...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of the authors three unwarranted claims, respectively, I would need to know the n...
^^
Line 17, column 294, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'accidents'' or 'accident's'?
Suggestion: accidents'; accident's
...r, the comparison with Seaville and the accidents distribution whole year round.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, may, so, therefore, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20920502092 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68807856203 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47489539749 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2609797076 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132738048253 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444101947175 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472965302239 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816441082033 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444728298198 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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