Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The comments convey that an effective education is supposed to meet individual needs and interests. However, I think it depends. In different phase of education, it is of great importance to have different target.
In terms about children in kindergartens or elementary school, a wealth of courses they have everyday is based on their individual needs and interest. Without doubt, a tremendous difference lies between young boys and young girls. Recently, a survey turns out to prove that most boys are fond of playing video games, comparing with the girls who are obsessed with Barbie dolls. Young children can not control their temper successfully and if they are taught something they are not interested in, they may irritate by the teachers, scream and even burst into tears. On the contrary, if they are on the right track and learn something they want to do, a hobby may be fostered, which is highly likely to have some connection with their own future career. Early year education lays a foundation for children’s promising future, which it is effective in my point of view.
When growing up, teenagers ought to face various obstacles and sometimes they have no choice but to do something that they do not adept at. For instance, high school students who are preparing for the college entrance exams can not select those undemanding courses. As we all know, for students learning science, they have to study physics, biology and chemistry. Nonetheless, those courses are connected with different people’s IQ. So, it is extremely tough for some students to learn that. But, in order to get admitted by their dream schools, hectic study must take up most their life. Teachers will consist on teaching those demanding courses in hope that each student can realize their dreams. During this way, the high school students can be taught about how to overcome the difficulties and develop their own personality. From this point, high school education help each student to step forward to their dream schools and develop personality at the same time, which is of great effectiveness.
Having got admitted by university, the students are at a cross road, facing a myriad of choices about what to do in the future. Each university has countless departments and majors, so course should be designed to meet individual need and interest in order to pave the way for different students’ different. Qian Liqun is a prestigious author in China, who was admitted to Peking University dur to his prowess in literature although he just got 4 in mathematics. After entering university, he mainly focused on the literature because the school designed many courses based on different need and interest. Therefore, Liqun Qian is rooted in Chinese literature history as a master in Chinese language. That is an exemplar about what a high education is.
In a nutshell, the speaker unfairly generalizes about what a effective education is. In high school, course should not be based on their interests and needs. However, in kindergarten and universities , it changes due to different targets.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...y school, a wealth of courses they have everyday is based on their individual needs and ...
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Line 9, column 60, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...speaker unfairly generalizes about what a effective education is. In high school,...
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Line 9, column 200, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...owever, in kindergarten and universities , it changes due to different targets.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, for instance, i think, of course, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12228796844 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81307615464 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534516765286 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9858882818 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1851851852 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164390766583 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456155807228 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046247107318 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.096845247967 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126796131114 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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