The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
In this argument, the store owners conclude that the increasingly more skateboarders in Plaza contributes to the decrease of their business.To support this conclusion, the author points out that more skateboarders bring environmental problem and everything will be on the right track,if the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. It is easy to understand the store owners are dying for booming business, but it is fraught with dubious assumptions that the deterioration of business has any relationship with skateboard users.So the author’s argument is problematic in several respects, rendering the argument unconvincing as it stands.
A threshold problem with the argument involves that the decrease in business is the result of huge groups of skateboarders. The writer fails to offer any evidence to support this assumption. Perhaps the owner’s strategy for running the business fails, or perhaps consumers have gradually changed their shopping style, preferring to shop online, instead of retailing stores. Given these possible scenarios, the facts that more skateboarders proves nothing about the decrease business in Central Plaza.In order to better evaluate the recommendation, I would need more information involving whether the skateboarders have ever done something, disturbing shopping experience or not.
In addition, The author demonstrates that skateboarders result in severe environment problems, like much more litter and vandalism through the shopping center. Yet, the author provides no evidence to support the assumption. Nobody can exclude the possibility that Central Plaza has spent less on taking charge of the environment or hiring sanitation workers. If fewer staff are in charge of sweeping the litters away and throwing the trash, it will turn out to be a tough assignment for them to finish cleaning on time as the way they did before. To reinforce the argument, the author would have to offer more assurances about the cost of cleaning the shopping center during the past years.
Finally, the author shed light upon the opinion that prohibiting skateboarding will definitely solve the problem.Absent evidence to the contrary, it is quite possible that Central Plaza will be less attractive to potential consumers. For example, maybe residents, especially youngsters, living there admires a challenging spirits. So if other nearby shopping center welcomes skateboarders but Central Plaza does not, the brand image of it can be hurt.People may get the idea that stores in Plaza disparage this kind of sport.To convince me that prohibition of skateboarding in Central Plaza will be effective, the author must give clear evidence about the projection of net cash flow of their business after that ban.
In a nutshell, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To better assess the strength of the author’s three unwarranted claims, respectively, I would need to know skateboarders’ impact on customers, the cost of managing the environment there and projection of net cash flow of their business after that ban .
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 480 350
No. of Characters: 2549 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.681 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.31 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.945 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 117 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.969 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ers have ever done something, disturbing shopping experience or not. In ad...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, so, therefore, for example, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2658.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61945031712 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16501051602 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515856236786 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.7414355463 57.8364921388 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.125 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5625 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128500841914 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385654613442 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513676077879 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0738456096406 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555651065845 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.91 12.5979740519 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 12.3882235529 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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