The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The author suggests that prohibiting skateboarding would lead to increasing number of shoppers in central plaza. Some questions need answering to evaluate the claim.
First off, the author suggests that stores owners attribute to their business decline to arisen skaters in the plaza. Still, how do these store owners make the conclusion? is any specific reason or evidence? The linkage between the number of shoppers and skaters is unclear. it may be true that people are unlikely to shop in central plaza because the environment gets dirtier due to more and more skaters. For example, skaters made many trash, and the shopping environment becomes dirtier and uncomfortable than it was before, then the shoppers are unlikely to visit. yet it could be totally different story.For instance, many shoppers found this place is so suitable for skating instead of shopping, so next time most of them come back for skating not shopping. this could explain why less shoppers and more skaters as well. The author has to answer the question to strengthen his or her argument.
Additionally, even if more and more skateboard users made lots of trash and the circumstance gets dirtier, that is not enough to elucidate the relationship from more skaters to fewer shoppers. it is not cogent just because of the store owners’ belief. how the author to do the survey? The credential should be presented. The argument may be true since all of the store are investigated by the third part with reliable reputation, they made 95% of visitors and 90% of them were unwilling to come shopping again for the sake of the excessive garbage. However, the practical situation could be disparate if the sample size is too small. For instance, maybe the writer only asks one store owner who doesn’t sell skate, as more and more skaters comes, the store owner doesn’t benefit at all. The skateboard stores business has arisen abruptly and make much money. he or she could complain about tremendously increasing skateboard users just because he or she is jealous of the neighborhood stores selling skates. Therefore, the author needs elaborating on how the store owners report the results and what methodology is used.
Furthermore, the writer suggests that skateboarding should be prohibited to expect a business recovers in central plaza. why does the author expect a prosperous business back to previously high level by prohibiting the skateboarding? Probably it is correct since no accommodation for shoppers to stay. For example, too many skaters occupy the local hotels and there is no more room available for other people who want to shop to stay, so they give up. yet there is another possibility. All of the visitors are coming for skating due to wonderful skating place, not for shopping, every winter thousands of hundreds of people swam for skating. Once skateboarding is prohibited, no people will visit and the business falls down rapidly. it is essential for the author to reply the question to make argument more convincing.
To make the argument more cogent, the author must address the above questions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 513 350
No. of Characters: 2519 1500
No. of Different Words: 238 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.759 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.91 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.63 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.467 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...these store owners make the conclusion? is any specific reason or evidence? The li...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ber of shoppers and skaters is unclear. it may be true that people are unlikely to...
^^
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun trash seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much trash', 'a good deal of trash'.
Suggestion: much trash; a good deal of trash
...more skaters. For example, skaters made many trash, and the shopping environment becomes d...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yet
...hen the shoppers are unlikely to visit. yet it could be totally different story.For...
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Line 3, column 610, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...yet it could be totally different story.For instance, many shoppers found this plac...
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Line 3, column 765, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...hem come back for skating not shopping. this could explain why less shoppers and mor...
^^^^
Line 3, column 788, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun shoppers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ng not shopping. this could explain why less shoppers and more skaters as well. The ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ip from more skaters to fewer shoppers. it is not cogent just because of the store...
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Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...cause of the store owners' belief. how the author to do the survey? The creden...
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Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...esented. The argument may be true since all of the store are investigated by the third par...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 743, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skaters'' or 'skater's'?
Suggestion: skaters'; skater's
...esn't sell skate, as more and more skaters comes, the store owner doesn't ben...
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Line 5, column 875, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...as arisen abruptly and make much money. he or she could complain about tremendousl...
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Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Why
...t a business recovers in central plaza. why does the author expect a prosperous bus...
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Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...teboarding? Probably it is correct since no accommodation for shoppers to stay. F...
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Line 7, column 488, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...e up. yet there is another possibility. All of the visitors are coming for skating due to ...
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Line 7, column 736, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...it and the business falls down rapidly. it is essential for the author to reply th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, third, well, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 510.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11176470588 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76764966348 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492156862745 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.7491921569 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155886190923 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456034057287 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575999921944 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102597747058 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700120641446 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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