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The president and administrative staff of Grove College come to the conclusion that, Grove School should continue its long existing tradition of enrolling only female students and not accept males into their programs, based on some survey results from among the students. The author of this argument is potentially valid, but before the argument can be assessed correctly and recommended to be implemented by the college's governing committee, three questions must be answered by the proponents of the proposition.
Firstly, is the 80 percent of the students responding to a survey a fair representation of the students as a whole in the college? It may be possible that the students who participated in the survey are all females, or even majority of them are females, which significantly drives the results of the survey into the realms of biasedness. If it is true that a significant portion of the respondents were females, they may be more inclined to an opinion that the college should only accept female enrollments. If any of these cases come as true, the persuasiveness of the argument is remarkably undermined.
Secondly, are the respondents from the alumnae of the college aware of the present status of the college and the needs that are required because of the dynamism of the world. It may be possible that, the participants from among the alumnae are, from their stint at the college, are biased towards the only-females opinion, and not necessarily analyze if the co-education is actually required in the college. For example, they may have been, during their study years, constantly harassed or bullied by their male friends in colleges they studied before enrolling in the current one, where they found comparatively more just and equitable environment free from discriminations. Unless the author is able to answer the question whether the respondents are being driven towards their opinion or standing on the basis of some prejudices of biases, the argument may not hold a lot of credibility.
Thirdly, the author assumes that, a causal relationship exists between the morale of the students and their gender, which is again flawed. The author also assumes that the alumnae will only be convinced to help the college financially only if the college complies to their opinions. It may be possible that the ones that were constantly helping the college were from the other 50% of the alumnae who took position in favour of co-education.
While the recommendation by the president and administrative staff may prove to be beneficial to the college in boosting up the morale of the students and perhaps even strengthening the financial position of the college, it is based on a lot of unwarranted assumptions, which do not lend a lot credibility unless the author of the argument is able to answer the questions raised in the paragraphs above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2347 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.994 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.92 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.01 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.929 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.412 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended being'.
Suggestion: recommended being
... argument can be assessed correctly and recommended to be implemented by the colleges governing c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 713, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...ns. Unless the author is able to answer the question whether the respondents are being driven toward...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stions raised in the paragraphs above.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11252653928 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98641222167 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452229299363 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.5224321318 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.0 119.503703932 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6428571429 23.324526521 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.218282227539 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0743258471296 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.128457276422 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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