according to a recent report, charting among college and university students is on the rise. .....
According to the report, the author contends that all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes to decrease cheating among students. However, the evidence provided by the author is insufficient.
The author claims that Groveton College has successfully reduced student cheating by adopting an honor code. However, we have no information about the exact number of reduction of student cheating. It is possible that the registration of a student in Groveton College has been dropping over the past five years; therefore, because of the reduction in registration, it is very normal that the number of student cheating is going to drop. Even if the number of registration did not drop over the past five years, we must know whether the report is authentic not fabricated? All of us know that a bunch of colleges would make lots of advertisements to let everyone know how great the school is and how preeminent the students of them are. Thus, maybe Groveton College fabricated the result of the survey trying to make the parents send their children to Groveton desperately.
The author also states that there was an apparent difference when the honor codes are implemented five years later. Here we need to know the precise figure among the past five years. It is likely that the case of cheating has higher than thirty cases in the first two years. But the author only provides us the beautiful data what they want us to see. In addition, the number of cheating case is reported by the teacher. Thus, we need to know whether the management tier of the school would cut the salary of the teacher or dismiss the teacher if the teacher reports too many cases to the chancellor. If the teacher does not report the genuine result because of the threaten, then the report is no value to be discussed.
Furthermore, the author argues that all the other colleges should adopt honor codes in order to decrease cheating among students. However, we need to know whether the condition of the Groveton or the institutions of the Groveton can represent any other universities? The author seems to assume that other college also has the problem of cheating. Perhaps some of the schools have the trouble of cheating, it does not mean that they should substitute honor codes for current cheating-forbidding method. We should know more explicit details of the other schools before we suggest those school to adopt honor codes.
To conclude, the author must present more evidence like the above mentioned to strengthen the claim.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 --not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2052 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.84 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.589 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.372 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.177 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 663, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ot report the genuine result because of the threaten, then the report is no value to be disc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...so has the problem of cheating. Perhaps some of the schools have the trouble of cheating, i...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96226415094 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67746752075 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455188679245 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8915563608 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.19047619 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174520768625 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560436908683 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626914055135 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102920785577 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762967099454 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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