Ambitious dreams are better than realistic goals. Agree or disagree?
With the advent of modernization, it is conceivable that the competition between human beings has become increasingly fierce and acute. Thus, how to make the fabulous choice under limited resources is very critical. Someone declares that we should dream big and pursue it keenly. Conversely, someone advocates that we should set a practical goal because it is more sensible and it is easier to fulfill. However, from my perspective, I suppose that we should dream big and set the target in the highest peak. The reasons and details will be demonstrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, one ambitious dream or target can keep motivating us and make us more recognize ourselves. To be more specific, a challenging goal always accompanies various kinds of obstacles and impedances. Only when we overcome those difficulties, we can truly enjoy the sense of achievement and happiness. For instance, when I was an undergraduate student, I participated in a team, and our goal is to get a champion of the Biomedical engineering competition. During that period, we have faced a multitude of problems and obstruction, but we successfully contrived an integrated device at the end. Finally, we only derived a silver medal, but I indeed learned a host of things such as how to collaborate with teammates and how to solve a problem efficiently. Plus, I find out my drawbacks and shortages. Hence, even though we did not get a champion, but I already obtained much more satisfaction than getting the champion.
Furthermore, rather than aiming a realistic goal, dreaming big can enrich our daily lives and help us do not be trapped in a comfort zone. By setting a sizeable dream, one may keep dedicate himself in learning something and do not give up quickly in the process. To illustrate, when you have a strong desire for something, you will put great endeavors into it and try to make an improvement. Besides, with your dream, you can find the purpose of your life. If someone only has a practical goal or dream, he will not make significant progress, and they will keep living in a tedious life.
In a word, I firmly uphold the point that one should pursue ambitious dreams even they are unrealistic. It is because that big dreams can bring out the best in everyone and consequently produce a revolution in our life; also, they are motivation for us to perform splendidly at school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, conversely, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, for instance, i suppose, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91111111111 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9740902172 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553086419753 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6700678554 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7142857143 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113379492143 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332681486738 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415481209226 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737611881643 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316574030965 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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