“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
As the development of technology and the harmony of society, more and more children have a chance to learn. However, the competitions between students are becoming fierce and acute; thus, how to remain our competitive edges is a big challenge. Some would say that their child should study different materials so their child can outstrip other students. However, from my perspective, I believe that students should study the same national curriculum. But some talented students, they do have a right to pursue different education.
Firstly, every student has a different growing environment and a different thinking mode. Some children have a rich family and high-education parents; however, some children born in a nasty environment and do not have a perfect family. Therefore, it is likely that the student who has a rich family can always have a better performance than those poor children, just because they have great studying environment, wonderful family support and have money to go to cram school to improve their education. But, if all the students need to learn the same curriculum then the gap between rich student and poor student can be dwindled. For example, even though the curriculum is hard. But the poor students can also get the great score through laborious studying. Thus, those poor students have the same opportunity to get into a supreme university, because those universities would not consider whether those rich students have some special skills, those universities would only consider their education performance.
Secondly, not every school have enough money to set up a bunch of different kinds of class such as dancing, singing, and e-sporting. School need to pay lots of money on those courses such as buying new equipment and recuriting new teacher; thus, not every school have spare money to open those curricula. For example, as the time elapsing, most parents don't like to have a child so the number of new-born children is going to drop down significantly. It is hard for the school to maintain their daily expanse because of decreasing numbers of students, not to say going to establish new courses.
However, I believe that some children who have a rich family and have strong capability have a chance to learn more versatile and skills. Furthermore, I also believe that the government should build some specific school which provides special courses. For example, if my son tells me that he wants to become to a singer and he also has a little talent on singing, then I would decide to send my child to the special school for improving his singing skills. The government not only should build some special schools to the demand for those talented students, but also find the talented students to the school actively.
To conclude, I believe that most children need to take the same curriculum but for some talented students they have an opportunity to seek their interest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06846473029 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70330994862 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441908713693 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3555349587 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.333333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9523809524 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103111180517 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424390930839 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485803967005 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713885130929 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329895888722 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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