the following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice for a client.
Most home in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating, ...
The author of the letter gave some investment suggestion to their clients. However, the author must answer the following questions to strengthen his claim.
The author maintains that the climate forecaster predicted that below-normal temperatures weather pattern will continue for several more years. However, we should ask: does this climate forecaster indeed has the qualified capability to predict the weather pattern. If this so-called climate forecaster is merely a bachelor of the college. Or he just had taken a climate course when he was a college student, then he called himself a forecaster. Then, we cannot trust him. Even if this climate forecaster has abundant knowledge of climate, we should also ask whether he had obtained the predict data by training from any wrong climate model? As far as we know that the climate is changing anytime anywhere. It is hard to believe that one forecaster can know how the climate will be in after years.
The author also contends that there are many new homes are being built in the region, because of the recent population growth. Nonetheless, we have to ask whether those new home are being built for the new residents? Maybe those new houses are being built to become a financial investment of the rich men not because of the population growth. Furthermore, population growth does not mean that the demand for heating oil will rise. Perhaps the population growth is contributed by the local residents, and those local residents already have a fireplace in their own house. Thus, they do not need to buy any new fireplace to heat oil.
Even if there is a high demand for heating oil, we still need to know whether Consolidated Industries can obtain a huge amount of profit from those consumers? If there are many corporations selling the same things that Consolidated Industries have, or even selling more practical products than Consolidated Industries, then Consolidated Industries may not get any advantage from the trend. Even though the Consolidated Industries have strong competitive edges than any other firm, we still need to ask whether those consumers know Consolidated Industries? Maybe other kinds of corporations already have a retail store in the region and already have a strong relationship with those local residents. But the Consolidated Industries is just a new-established industry, no one knows them. Thus, the local residents may prefer to buy other corporations products just because they know those corporations even though Consolidated corporation can render lots of discount or a bunch of benefits to their consumer.
To conclude, to make the claim more convincing, the author of the letter should address the above-mentioned question to strengthen his claim.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2250 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.09 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.825 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.217 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.101 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.207 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ability to predict the weather pattern. If this so-called climate forecaster is me...
^^
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...should also ask whether he had obtained the predict data by training from any wrong climate...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... training from any wrong climate model? As far as we know that the climate is chan...
^^
Line 7, column 1008, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a bunch of benefits to their consumer. To conclude, to make the claim more conv...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22171945701 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88575347968 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1106154715 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.347826087 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30434782609 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103814710681 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337838257107 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341198264518 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0593771322311 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336419749914 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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