"According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the last year. Clearly, the content of these reviews is not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not in the quality of our movies but with public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater quantity of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
The memo from the advertising director of the super screen movie production Company concludes that the problem of the super screen production is receiving greater number of positive reviews than the past year due to the report of marketing department provides that the fewer people have attended super screen produced movies in the any other year and by this conclusions the super screen movie production wants to approach to more people rather than concentrate on the contents of the reviews. hence this assertion clearly has many flaws which has no evidences to prove that super screen movie production are receiving more reviews and lesser number of people to get influenced by the reviews.
One of the main flaws can be clearly displayed that what if the report of the marketing team has provided the data wrong? this can be viewed as that there can also be more poeple than the past few years which has aprrocahed to the super screen produced movies. but the people are not giving reviews about the movies. this can considerably thought as people in less number of votes or reviews about the movie can have great impact on the positive reviews.it is also possible that the super screen prouduced movies have decreased than the past years. so without the effective data of the number of people and movies produced the marketing department can get wrong.
Secondly the memo provides that the contents of the movies are not reaching enough of their prospective viewers, Why? this can be flawed that the people are more likely to see the super screen movies but the movie contents are not providing them attraction towards movie to watch by what the people are not merely engaged to watch the movie hence reducing the number of views to watch movie and not able to get the negative which can also be the major reason whivch provides increasing number of positive reviews.
Thirdly the people are not watching the movie due to the awareness which can be the another reason in increasing the number of positive reviews. if the people are able to watch the movie more frequently the voting of the reviews gets increased by a great percenatge which can effect the due numbver of positive votes of the super screen movie production. this can be flawed as the lack of awarenes among the people should be spread. To do so the super screen should therefore alloccate a greater share of its budget next year to reach the public through advertising. this eccentricly happens to do that the funds among the super screen production can get less and by that the movies production can also get less which concludes to provides less number of movies. due to this, the less number of movies is directly proportional to the less number of votes of reviews which can get the increase in positivve reviews..
In the conclusion the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. if the author is able to answer the questions above and offer more evidences it will be possible to meet the predections that the super screen production movies are able to get positive reviews.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: One of the main flaws can be clearly displayed that what if the report of the marketing team has provided the data wrong? this can be viewed as that there can also be more poeple than the past few years which has aprrocahed to the super screen produced movies. but the people are not giving reviews about the movies. this can considerably thought as people in less number of votes or reviews about the movie can have great impact on the positive reviews.it is also possible that the super screen
Error: reviews.it Suggestion: reviews
Error: poeple Suggestion: people
Error: aprrocahed Suggestion: approached
Sentence: prouduced movies have decreased than the past years. so without the effective data of the number of people and movies produced the marketing department can get wrong.
Error: prouduced Suggestion: produced
Sentence: Secondly the memo provides that the contents of the movies are not reaching enough of their prospective viewers, Why? this can be flawed that the people are more likely to see the super screen movies but the movie contents are not providing them attraction towards movie to watch by what the people are not merely engaged to watch the movie hence reducing the number of views to watch movie and not able to get the negative which can also be the major reason whivch provides increasing number of
Error: whivch Suggestion: which
Sentence: Thirdly the people are not watching the movie due to the awareness which can be the another reason in increasing the number of positive reviews. if the people are able to watch the movie more frequently the voting of the reviews gets increased by a great percenatge which can effect the due numbver of positive votes of the super screen movie production. this can be flawed as the lack of awarenes among the people should be spread.
Error: numbver Suggestion: number
Error: awarenes Suggestion: awareness
Error: percenatge Suggestion: percentage
Sentence: To do so the super screen should therefore alloccate a greater share of its budget next year to reach the public through advertising. this eccentricly happens to do that the funds among the super screen production can get less and by that the movies production can also get less which concludes to provides less number of movies. due to this, the less number of movies is directly proportional to the less number of votes of reviews which can get the increase in positivve reviews..
Error: .. Suggestion: an
Error: alloccate Suggestion: allocate
Error: eccentricly Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: positivve Suggestion: positive
Sentence: In the conclusion the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. if the author is able to answer the questions above and offer more evidences it will be possible to meet the predections that the super screen production movies are able to get positive reviews.
Error: predections Suggestion: predictions
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2554 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.774 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.426 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 59.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.295 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.544 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.76 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.245 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ced movies in the any other year and by this conclusions the super screen movie prod...
^^^^
Line 1, column 495, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hence
...entrate on the contents of the reviews. hence this assertion clearly has many flaws w...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 495, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: hence,
...entrate on the contents of the reviews. hence this assertion clearly has many flaws w...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...eting team has provided the data wrong? this can be viewed as that there can also be...
^^^^
Line 4, column 262, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ed to the super screen produced movies. but the people are not giving reviews about...
^^^
Line 4, column 318, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...re not giving reviews about the movies. this can considerably thought as people in l...
^^^^
Line 4, column 340, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...about the movies. this can considerably thought as people in less number of votes or re...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 550, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ies have decreased than the past years. so without the effective data of the numbe...
^^
Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ough of their prospective viewers, Why? this can be flawed that the people are more ...
^^^^
Line 10, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...reasing the number of positive reviews. if the people are able to watch the movie ...
^^
Line 10, column 146, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...reasing the number of positive reviews. if the people are able to watch the movie ...
^^
Line 10, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...s of the super screen movie production. this can be flawed as the lack of awarenes a...
^^^^
Line 10, column 568, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...o reach the public through advertising. this eccentricly happens to do that the fund...
^^^^
Line 10, column 677, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'movies'' or 'movie's'?
Suggestion: movies'; movie's
...production can get less and by that the movies production can also get less which conc...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 732, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'provide'.
Suggestion: provide
...on can also get less which concludes to provides less number of movies. due to this, the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 764, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Due
...udes to provides less number of movies. due to this, the less number of movies is d...
^^^
Line 10, column 914, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...an get the increase in positivve reviews.. In the conclusion the argument as ...
^^
Line 13, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...nce on several unwarranted assumptions. if the author is able to answer the questi...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2598.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 535.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85607476636 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46316137199 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.343925233645 0.468620217663 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 795.6 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.237988414 57.8364921388 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.823529412 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4705882353 23.324526521 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394943012926 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155394880371 0.0743258471296 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118818024528 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268242053055 0.128457276422 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122375133375 0.0628817314937 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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