In the preceding argument, the business manager states that they ought to expand their coverage of weather and local news on all news programs, the conclusion is based on the following premises. Firstly, the television station received complaints from their viewers argued that the weather and the local news time is very short. Secondly, the local business that used to advertise on the television has canceled their advertisements. So, in order to save the profits they manager states to increase the coverage time of the local and weather news. Hence, in the first glance it may seem plausible. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on plethora of assumptions that could undermine the value of the argument.
To begin with, the manager states that the audiences start complain from the decrease coverage of the weather and local news. However, the one fact here is what is the appropriate time to cover the weather news its just few minutes to keep the people informed about the weather status. Then, is not plausible to increase time of local news when there are not new events, so what the television will present?. Thus, in such case the following assumption would be weakened.
Another unsupported assumption is the local advertisement companies have been canceled with the local television, but the assumption lack a depth of details that would help to evaluate the significance of the results. Perhaps they start cancelling due to bad services from the television, or disorganization or perhaps there is not conspicuous plan for their work, leads to avoid dealing with them and may be there is better new television with new mentality that will flourish their advertisements. Consequently, this assumption is not the real cause of the decline.
Thirdly, even there is a positive and concrete relation between coverage more local and weather news and increase the revenues, this does not necessarily indicate a blatant relation between the two events. In other words, the manager has to think how they have to increase their profits?, perhaps they have to organize their programs or by adding new programs to the local television such as, the talent shows or the singing programs. So, building decisions depend on weak relation is not reliable.
In conclusion, the manager fails to mention one key factor. Namely, in order to increase the profits they have to change their old mind and be more open to every things new. Thus, without complete information the argument is unsubstantiated and opened to debate
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2055 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.988 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.649 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.684 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.563 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.895 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...very short. Secondly, the local business that used to advertise on the television...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, as to, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1359223301 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73955053753 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485436893204 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3443385685 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.368421053 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6842105263 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94736842105 5.70786347227 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287758273022 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933343705382 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921766383838 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162204915881 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11766361284 0.0628817314937 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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