As per the recent report from the indicates that during the past year, fewer people attended the super screen produced movies and therefore suggesting few point which concludes that there should be increase in the budget of the advertising to make it to reach more people. The evidence shown up in the memo is unjustified and unconvincing.
Firstly the according to advertising director of the super screen movie production, he using the report from the marketing department for conclusion. He has not given any details about how was this report prepared or even the sample period of the report. so considering the report would not be appropriate. And as the people viewing the super screen produced movies has reduced it might be the case that not much good movies are produced from the production house. And if good produced then it might be case that more blockbuster films have been released at same time of release of the super screen produced movies. so justifying that people are less watching movie instead they should more focus on the other factors that can influence the low percentage of viewership.
Yet the positive reviewers has increased during the past year means that more people has liked movies according to the report but again there is no idea how this statement is justified in the statement. What is the sample space of the reviewers, are they the loyal customers of the production house, fans of the movie stars who always gives positive reviews for their star's movies.It doesn't contends that reviews are not reaching the people that may mean that more negative reviews are reaching to the people which has not been covered during constructing report.
It might be a case that movies of the super screen production was leaked before the release of the movie or during the film was in the theaters and that has lead to less people turn up for the watching the movies at the theater and watching it at home for free. So proper care should be taken that the movies are not leaked. There could be on other possibility that the money spend during the last year was not properly spend in way that it get turn out of the maximum customers.
As argument stated that the problem doesn't lie in the quality of the film may be true or not, as department which reported the reason for less people coming to watch the movie are from the same production house and they will never say that the quality of the movie is not good. They instead will always try to praise their works but which might be not true. The quality of the film can be bad or the genre, idea selected by the production house would not be affable among the people. Or it can a cliche one having tons of movies on that subject.
Hence the all above stated above justifies that argument is unconvincing and on basis of that stated in argument the advertisement budget can't be increased. As the success of the film depends on many factors apart from the advertising such as how much more people are able to relate the movies to their real life, genre, how much film fantasies them. So the argument is not justifying the increase of the budget of advertising.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 557 350
No. of Characters: 2549 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.858 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.576 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.337 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.795 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun point seems to be countable; consider using: 'few points'.
Suggestion: few points
...roduced movies and therefore suggesting few point which concludes that there should be in...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increased'?
Suggestion: increased
...nt which concludes that there should be increase in the budget of the advertising to mak...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...f the super screen movie production, he using the report from the marketing departmen...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...r even the sample period of the report. so considering the report would not be app...
^^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...se of the super screen produced movies. so justifying that people are less watchin...
^^
Line 6, column 382, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...positive reviews for their stars movies.It doesnt contends that reviews are not re...
^^
Line 6, column 385, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...itive reviews for their stars movies.It doesnt contends that reviews are not reaching ...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 166, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...as in the theaters and that has lead to less people turn up for the watching the mov...
^^^^
Line 8, column 361, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ked. There could be on other possibility that the money spend during the last yea...
^^
Line 10, column 37, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... As argument stated that the problem doesnt lie in the quality of the film may be t...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 139, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...epartment which reported the reason for less people coming to watch the movie are fr...
^^^^
Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ing tons of movies on that subject. Hence the all above stated above justifies th...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 139, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ed in argument the advertisement budget cant be increased. As the success of the fil...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, apart from, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68772563177 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39447424039 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404332129964 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.8519764399 57.8364921388 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.85 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356225861994 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107930383302 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905823561649 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19167591745 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0916011274474 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.3550499002 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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