The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.
"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the analytical piece concludes that for any music student his first choice would be the mozart school. author finds this school to be the best school in this world for the music looking to its distinguished features and facilities. but considering the school as the best in world would be an extreme comparison as school is compared in variety of features.
Firstly the author asserts that the mozart school stresses intensively on the practice and training of the student which is a very good strategy but might not be good for all as for the musician should be given proper rest time because taking care of the body is also important for the students. The school has ample facilities for the students in the institute. this shows that the institute is well developed and might be taking more fees from the student which should be considered.
The author has suggested that institute has most distinguished teachers in world. this is can be seen as an exaggerated statement form the author. As the school might have most knowledgeable faculty in some fields but cann't feasibly have it in all the branches of music. music contains various types of muisc mainly classical and western. And this branches have deep stems down and many specialities in it. so considering it as the best school in the world is an extreme idea used by the author.
As per the author there are many famous graduates of this school in the music field that doesn't show the success ratio of the graduates is high. there might be potential in those who got successful and are being highly paid. it is there hard work which makes them as highly paid musicians in the nation. And there are many other musicians in the world who are not graduated from the mozart but highly successfull so it doesn't make compulsion to get studied in the mozart to be successful in music field.
In conclusion the author analytical piece is not convinvincing as he has failed to make his arguement convincing. because arguement is ended with absence of the statistical data regarding the students graduated vs students getting highly paid or being successful.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: As the school might have most knowledgeable faculty in some fields but cann't feasibly have it in all the branches of music. music contains various types of muisc mainly classical and western.
Error: muisc Suggestion: music
Sentence: And there are many other musicians in the world who are not graduated from the mozart but highly successfull so it doesn't make compulsion to get studied in the mozart to be successful in music field.
Error: successfull Suggestion: successful
Sentence: In conclusion the author analytical piece is not convinvincing as he has failed to make his arguement convincing. because arguement is ended with absence of the statistical data regarding the students graduated vs students getting highly paid or being successful.
Error: convinvincing Suggestion: convincing
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1736 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.692 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.573 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.914 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.449 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.78 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.187 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...irst choice would be the mozart school. author finds this school to be the best scho...
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Line 2, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... mozart school. author finds this school to be the best school in this world for ...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... distinguished features and facilities. but considering the school as the best in w...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sidering the school as the best in world would be an extreme comparison as school...
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Line 7, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tudent which is a very good strategy but might not be good for all as for the mus...
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Line 9, column 67, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: This
...ties for the students in the institute. this shows that the institute is well develo...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d and might be taking more fees from the student which should be considered. ...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... student which should be considered. The author has suggested that institute ...
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Line 12, column 83, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...s most distinguished teachers in world. this is can be seen as an exaggerated statem...
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Line 12, column 131, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...can be seen as an exaggerated statement form the author. As the school might have m...
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Line 13, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Music
...y have it in all the branches of music. music contains various types of muisc mainl...
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Line 13, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ranches of music. music contains various types of muisc mainly classical and west...
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Line 14, column 163, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ering it as the best school in the world is an extreme idea used by the author. ...
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Line 18, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n extreme idea used by the author. As per the author there are many famous gr...
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Line 18, column 90, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... of this school in the music field that doesnt show the success ratio of the graduates...
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Line 18, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...success ratio of the graduates is high. there might be potential in those who got su...
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Line 19, column 56, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...t successful and are being highly paid. it is there hard work which makes them as ...
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Line 19, column 159, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in the nation. And there are many other musicians in the world who are not gradu...
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Line 20, column 91, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...the mozart but highly successfull so it doesnt make compulsion to get studied in the m...
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Line 20, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lsion to get studied in the mozart to be successful in music field. In concl...
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Line 24, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...ailed to make his arguement convincing. because arguement is ended with absence of the ...
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Line 24, column 161, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e arguement is ended with absence of the statistical data regarding the students ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, look, regarding, so, well, as for, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91008174387 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60952072385 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460490463215 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3460428354 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3888888889 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 5.15768463074 330% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31256970539 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102891985467 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910471939635 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109071053164 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817949702497 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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