"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site. Author made conclusion that Mozarts School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. Many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musician. There are stated and unstated assumption made by author which need to be consider.
Firstly, author puts several features of Mozart's School. Starting with argument author made strong assumption that Mozart's School should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. In an convincing argument author further state, Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age level. There is no audition to attend the school. Author made strong assumption that parents are more intersted enrolling their child where there is no requirement such as skills, age limit. It's possibility of parents are very much carying about their child's education, they want their child
to be made strong enough to fulfill criteria and then only enroll in any school.
Secondly, author state that School offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Author had strong assumption that, be providing all types of musical instruments and as well as styles and genres from classical to rock more student get attracted. Author need to check whether, each and every according to their age got musical instruments. Whether they are really happy with instruents and styles and genres.
Thirdly, author mention that faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Author made assumption by including distinguished musician, students get well trained and it's reason for enrolling new students. It's possibility of because of distinguished musician faculty, students are involved with their teaching style. They may have not ability to convince students. In further addition, on behalf all this author made strong assumption that, many Mozarts graduates have gone to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians. Those who are well known and highly paid professional musicians may have inbuilt skills, ability so they are going
more famous and highly paid professional.
To sum up with all, author need to check several factor before making conclusion. There are several stated and unstated assumption made by author which tends to weaken argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 2043 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.32 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.562 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.542 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
... appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site. Author made conclusion that Mozarts Sc...
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Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...olling their child in music lessons. In an convincing argument author further stat...
^^
Line 8, column 47, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...y, author mention that faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the are...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 673, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nbuilt skills, ability so they are going more famous and highly paid professional...
^^^
Line 11, column 42, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: 'several factors'.
Suggestion: several factors
...o sum up with all, author need to check several factor before making conclusion. There are sev...
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Line 11, column 121, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
.... There are several stated and unstated assumption made by author which tends to weaken ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45052083333 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.631954608 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46875 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0526038148 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1363636364 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4545454545 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379256111157 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134105727164 0.0743258471296 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146415196691 0.0701772020484 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182789270043 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183067457578 0.0628817314937 291% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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