The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities Recently we signed a contract with the Fly Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse i

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The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.

"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. This difference in pest damage is best explained by the negligence of Fly-Away."

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The following appeared in memo from the Vice President of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities. Author drawn conclusion that, contracting Fly-Away Pest control company we discovered more food get destroyed as compared to Buzzoff company. This difference in pest damage is best explained by the negligence of Fly-Away. There are several alternative to possibility for such reason, author need to consider this alternative before making conclusion.

Firstly, Author state that recently we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest control company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm city, but last month we discovered that over $20000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Author need to find out reason for food damage. There are several factor for damage of food such as weather condition, Keeping food from days so that it may get damage.

Secondly, author state that Meanwhile the Buzzoff Pest control company, which we used for many years in palm city, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, last month only $10000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Author need to check out several factor, weather condition, usage food. It might possibility that Weather situation of Wintervale is good than Palm city. Author mention Buzzoff company which were used from many years, have only $10000 worth of food damage in last month. It might possibility of they overcome this damage of food to $10000, which quite unexpected result.

Thirdly, author concluded that the difference in pest damage is best explained by the negligence of Fly-Away. Author need to compare past data of both company, it's possibility that Fly-Away company start their pest control services in current, so they are working on their pest control services.

To sum up with all, author need to check all point and possibility of alternative for drawing conclusion. There are several other aspects which need to be taken in to consideration then only argument become strengthen.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'alternatives'?
Suggestion: alternatives
...gligence of Fly-Away. There are several alternative to possibility for such reason, author ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: 'several factors'.
Suggestion: several factors
...d out reason for food damage. There are several factor for damage of food such as weather cond...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'factors'?
Suggestion: factors
...ason for food damage. There are several factor for damage of food such as weather cond...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: 'several factors'.
Suggestion: several factors
...y pest damage. Author need to check out several factor, weather condition, usage food. It migh...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 332.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21385542169 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59511157351 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457831325301 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1406912257 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.1875 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453741491113 0.218282227539 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15435704315 0.0743258471296 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16307682377 0.0701772020484 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273067727865 0.128457276422 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.162271511529 0.0628817314937 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'alternatives'?
Suggestion: alternatives
...gligence of Fly-Away. There are several alternative to possibility for such reason, author ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: 'several factors'.
Suggestion: several factors
...d out reason for food damage. There are several factor for damage of food such as weather cond...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'factors'?
Suggestion: factors
...ason for food damage. There are several factor for damage of food such as weather cond...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: 'several factors'.
Suggestion: several factors
...y pest damage. Author need to check out several factor, weather condition, usage food. It migh...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 332.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21385542169 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59511157351 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457831325301 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1406912257 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.1875 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453741491113 0.218282227539 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15435704315 0.0743258471296 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16307682377 0.0701772020484 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273067727865 0.128457276422 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.162271511529 0.0628817314937 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.