The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a ten-year budget for the city of Calatrava.
"The birthrate in our city is declining: in fact, last year's birthrate was only one-half that of five years ago. Thus the number of students enrolled in our public schools will soon decrease dramatically, and we can safely reduce the funds budgeted
for education during the next decade. At the same time, we can reduce funding for athletic playing fields and other recreational facilities. As a result, we will have sufficient money to fund city facilities and programs used primarily by adults, since
we can expect the adult population of the city to increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a ten year budget for the city of Calatrava. Author drawn conclusion on the that due to declining in birthrate, enroolment of student at public school decrease dramatically. As a result, sufficient money to fund
city facilities and program used primarily by adults. The given argument seeming plausible, but it's flawed argument. There are several assumption made by author, which required specific evidence. Before recommendation appeared in to fact, let us look in to the given argument.
Firstly, Author states that birthrate in Calatrava city is declining, last year's birthrate was only one half that of five years ago.Author unable to provide statistical data showing an birthrate ratio from last five years. we don't no about whether declination of birthrate consistent from
last five years. Author drawn strong assumption that, due to decline in birthrate number of students enrolled in our public school will soon decrease dramatically, so that we reduce funds budgeted for education during next decade. Author strongly predict that birthrate decline will consistent for next few decade so that we can reduce fund budget for education. Even if, the current scienario show an decline birthrate, but we can't predict for next few decade. It might possiblity that ratio decline may oppose to current scienario.
Secondly, because of decrease in enrollment author furthur attempt to claim that, funding for athletic playing field and other recreational facilities also get reduced. Author need evidences whether an public school run an athletic playing field and other recreational facilities. Whether students really interested in athletic playing field and other recreational facilities, or whether they more involved in studying, we don't no about student interest towards an athletic playing and other recreational facilities.
Lastly, author mention that by reducing an fund budget of an athletic playing field and recreatinal facility we have sufficient money to fund city facilities and program used primarily by adults, so that adult population of city to increase. Author made strong assumption that by providing sufficient money adult population grows increases.We dont' no about nexy few year situation, we can't predict adult shown there interest in athletic playing field and recreational facilities. It might possiblity in an upcoming adults are not interested in atheletic playing, instead they are more regorous about their education, about their job or even though may not got sufficient time for spending on athletic playing and other recreational facilities.
To concluding from the above data, assumption made by author required an evidences. argument become an weak argument because of lack of evidences, to strengthen the argument author need provide evidences.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2372 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.403 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 111 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.677 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.248 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...ble, but its flawed argument. There are several assumption made by author, which required specific...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
... its flawed argument. There are several assumption made by author, which required specific...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...te in Calatrava city is declining, last years birthrate was only one half that of fiv...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Author
...as only one half that of five years ago.Author unable to provide statistical data show...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ble to provide statistical data showing an birthrate ratio from last five years. w...
^^
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...n birthrate ratio from last five years. we dont no about whether declination of bi...
^^
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...irthrate ratio from last five years. we dont no about whether declination of birthra...
^^^^
Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ate ratio from last five years. we dont no about whether declination of birthrate ...
^^
Line 6, column 400, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...on. Even if, the current scienario show an decline birthrate, but we cant predict ...
^^
Line 6, column 429, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nario show an decline birthrate, but we cant predict for next few decade. It might p...
^^^^
Line 6, column 451, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun decade seems to be countable; consider using: 'few decades'.
Suggestion: few decades
...birthrate, but we cant predict for next few decade. It might possiblity that ratio decline...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 200, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... reduced. Author need evidences whether an public school run an athletic playing f...
^^
Line 8, column 424, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ther they more involved in studying, we dont no about student interest towards an at...
^^^^
Line 8, column 429, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...they more involved in studying, we dont no about student interest towards an athle...
^^
Line 10, column 41, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...Lastly, author mention that by reducing an fund budget of an athletic playing fiel...
^^
Line 10, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: We
... money adult population grows increases.We dont no about nexy few year situation, ...
^^
Line 10, column 344, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ney adult population grows increases.We dont no about nexy few year situation, we ca...
^^^^
Line 10, column 349, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...dult population grows increases.We dont no about nexy few year situation, we cant ...
^^
Line 10, column 386, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nt no about nexy few year situation, we cant predict adult shown there interest in a...
^^^^
Line 10, column 516, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'adult'?
Suggestion: adult
...ies. It might possiblity in an upcoming adults are not interested in atheletic playing...
^^^^^^
Line 12, column 71, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an evidence' or simply 'evidences'?
Suggestion: an evidence; evidences
...ata, assumption made by author required an evidences. argument become an weak argument becau...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Argument
...n made by author required an evidences. argument become an weak argument because of lack...
^^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 101, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... required an evidences. argument become an weak argument because of lack of eviden...
^^
Line 12, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...argument author need provide evidences.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2432.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5908045977 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88796391586 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459770114943 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2293552739 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.6 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264861604814 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920669714555 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141205339582 0.0701772020484 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150683082038 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144030731043 0.0628817314937 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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