The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report
in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday.
Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee — a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the
Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve overall productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers
to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following is recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company. Author made comparision between two companies without knowing there working structure, background history. Author drawn conclusion that for improving overall productivity Acme should require all of employee to take easy read course. There are several assumption made by author, which need evidence. before implementing the given argument let us look.
Firstly, Author state that many companies who having their employees take Ease Read speed-Reading course has greatly improved productivity. Acme companies and other companies differ in there work structure, so they may required fluent reader for there companies. Company may think towards employee growth by introducing an ease read speed reading course, this may also beneficial in account to company. Author had point that those graduates who takes course was able to read a 500 pages report in only two hours. It might possible that graduate have inherrant ability to read fast and grasp concept easily. It may not hold for all of remaining the employee. Author give an example of another graduate who rose from position of assistant manager to Vice president of the company under year. Assumption made by author look like flawed, because even though graduate has ability who work hard, sincerely. company may rose his position from assistant manager to some next level due to his ability now because of he had done course of Ease Read Speed-Reading.
Secondly, author made an accptable point that faster you read more information you can absorb in single workday. Easy read would cost acme only $500 per employee small price to pay when you consider the benefit. we don't know about ACME organisation whether how many graduates and labors work there? If organisation suppose 1000 people, whether they bare the amount for 1000 employee. It seem to held practical, ACME send there employee for Easy Read Speed Reading, then work load goes increasingly as employee more attentive towords course program.
Included in this fee three week seminar in spruce city and a lifelong subscription to the easy read newsletter. Employee who are shortlisted for the course, he has to spend three week in different city. company may bear his living cost for three week, paid an salary for three week even though he may not work. Author need ask question involving that much man power, there cost for Easy Read Speed Reading program may really give profitable output?
Argument become weak argument due several assumption made by author, which need to strengthen only by providing evidences.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 16 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2169 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.128 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.519 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.126 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wn conclusion that for improving overall productivity Acme should require all of ...
^^
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...yee to take easy read course. There are several assumption made by author, which need evidence. be...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...ake easy read course. There are several assumption made by author, which need evidence. be...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 406, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
...on made by author, which need evidence. before implementing the given argument let us ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 406, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on made by author, which need evidence. before implementing the given argument let us ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 644, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly. It may not hold for all of remaining the employee. Author give an example of ...
^^
Line 3, column 903, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Company
...e has ability who work hard, sincerely. company may rose his position from assistant ma...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 998, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because he' instead.
Suggestion: because he
... some next level due to his ability now because of he had done course of Ease Read Speed-Read...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...e to pay when you consider the benefit. we dont know about ACME organisation wheth...
^^
Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...o pay when you consider the benefit. we dont know about ACME organisation whether ho...
^^^^
Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'employee' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'employees'.
Suggestion: employees
..., whether they bare the amount for 1000 employee. It seem to held practical, ACME send t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
...y bare the amount for 1000 employee. It seem to held practical, ACME send there empl...
^^^^
Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'seminar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'seminars'.
Suggestion: seminars
...ram. Included in this fee three week seminar in spruce city and a lifelong subscript...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...n to the easy read newsletter. Employee who are shortlisted for the course, he has to s...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'week' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'weeks'.
Suggestion: weeks
...d for the course, he has to spend three week in different city. company may bear his...
^^^^
Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Company
... to spend three week in different city. company may bear his living cost for three week...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'week' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'weeks'.
Suggestion: weeks
...pany may bear his living cost for three week, paid an salary for three week even tho...
^^^^
Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ar his living cost for three week, paid an salary for three week even though he ma...
^^
Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'week' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'weeks'.
Suggestion: weeks
...or three week, paid an salary for three week even though he may not work. Author nee...
^^^^
Line 9, column 35, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...t? Argument become weak argument due several assumption made by author, which need to strengthe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.6327345309 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26777251185 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59543154575 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552132701422 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3001950818 57.8364921388 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.625 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368381185163 0.218282227539 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104025354231 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114744627887 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173372417411 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11740573028 0.0628817314937 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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