The following appeared in a memo from the director of a large group of hospitals.
"In a controlled laboratory study of liquid hand soaps, a concentrated solution of extra strength UltraClean hand soap produced a 40 percent greater reduction in harmful bacteria than did the liquid hand soaps currently used in our hospitals. During our recent test of regular-strength UltraClean with doctors, nurses, and visitors at our hospital in Worktown, the hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection (a 20 percent reduction) than did any of the other hospitals in our group. Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations, including those used by visitors, throughout our hospital system."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanation that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The following appeared in memo from the director of large group of hospitals. Author made conclusion that, UltraClean hand soap produced a 40 percent greater reduction in harmful bacteria than did the liquid soap currently used in our hospitals. The reduction in patient infections is the use of UltrClean soap. There are several alternate reason for reduction in patient infection which author take in to consideration while concluding argument.
Firstly, author state that in a controlled laboratory study of liquid hand soap, a concentrated solution of extra strength UltraClean hand soap produced a 40 percent greater reduction in harmful bacteria than did the liquid hand soap currently used in our hospital. In controlled laboratory means in fixed amount of group the liquid hand soap, a concentrated solution of extra strength UltraCean hand soap produced greater reduction of harmful bacteria. We don't know while it came to general purpose. If study conducted among the people who are physically fit, free from any disease then effect always shows positivity of Concentrated solution of extra strength.
Secondly, Author states that during of recent test of regular-strength Ultraclean with doctors, nurse, and visitors at our hospitals in work town, the hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection( a 20 percent reduction) than did any of the other hospitals in our group. It is possibility of there are previously several complaints from patients about cleanliness of hospital. Management comity started activity in which they include several other things such as notes, awareness chart. so that people also follow the standard guideline while entering in to hospitals.
Thirdly, author state that the explanation for the 20 percent reduction in patient infection is the use of UltraClean soap. By introducing UltraClean soap, whether it really helpful for reducing patient infection. Involving money in to introducing Ultraclean soap, leads to costly for hospital. Patient infection reduced when people aware about disease, it's effect. So that by implementing hospital regulation, infection will reduced.
In conclusion, author need to check several alternate option while concluding argument. Author did not consider other factor so that argument became week argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1913 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.466 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.85 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.652 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...eater reduction of harmful bacteria. We dont know while it came to general purpose. ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... things such as notes, awareness chart. so that people also follow the standard gu...
^^
Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... things such as notes, awareness chart. so that people also follow the standard guideli...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...ing hospital regulation, infection will reduced. In conclusion, author need to check...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... so that argument became week argument.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 349.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62464183381 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89900837436 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492836676218 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.2640492299 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.315789474 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3684210526 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489531420237 0.218282227539 224% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138892602699 0.0743258471296 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176583723246 0.0701772020484 252% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245549976339 0.128457276422 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218298911818 0.0628817314937 347% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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