In the discussion site, the arguer concludes that choosing Adam Realty as your real estate agent is better than Fitch Realty. To support his or her recommendation, he or she cites a series of facts and numbers to convince people to choose Adam if they want to sell their house. Those statistics seem at first glance logical and compelling, however, a clear inspection reveals that his or her argument is rife with unwarranted assumptions and untenable explanations. Adam is more superior than Fitch unless the arguer could provide more specific and persuasive answers to those questions needed to be asked.
To begin with, the arguer provides no evidence that the quality of a real estate firm is proportional to the number of its agents and the number of working hours per week that its agents work. Although Adam has more than 20 agents, compared to Fitch's total number, it does not necessarily indicate that the quality of Adam is better than Fitch. Besides, the difference in number between two companies cannot prove that the average quality of employees in Fitch is worse than that in Adam. We all believe that the overall ability of a firm depends on performance of its working staff. Even though the factor of how many working hours that its agents work affects the operation of a firm, we are not informed that information about how many Adam agents work part time. Without ruling out these analysis, the arguer's recommendation remains dubious at best.
Secondly, the arguer fails to think about the disparity in sales volume can readily be explained by a myriad of factors other than the comparative quality of the two firms. First, We are not informed the quality of each company, thus, It is unfair to make a connection that sales volume determine the quality of a company, which might convince local residents that Adam will be a better choice. However, there is a strong possibility that the serving area of Adam is filled with beautifully preserved houses that the buyers from other town really prefer to purchase, which could well explain that the sales volume in Adam is higher. There is another possibility that the serving area of Fitch is located in a place where there are so many manufacturing factories and polluted rivers, which may affect the performance of salesmen in Fitch. Without ruling out these possibilities, the arguer can not hastily draw the conclusion.
Thirdly, the arguer fails to take into considerations that the disparity of the speed of a sale is explainable by other plausible factors.The arguer sets the example with his own experience that the house listed with Fitch is more difficult to sell in a short period of time, whereas the house listed with Adam is far much faster to sell within one month. But the arguer ignores the unquestionable fact that the changing time will affect the pace of selling a house. During the ten years, the pace of economy is more swift than anyone could imagine. The leading real estate firms will definitely be keeping up with the flow of the river of economy. In addition, housing price also will change through the time. And price is the most intangible factor to be considered because it depends primarily on the policy of the government. If you want to sell your house at a good price, you would definitely not pay so much attention on how fast it could be sold, reversely, you would worry about the profit you could earn through selling your house. If the arguer still uses the old story to predict the future trend, even the most nonprofessional resident will not take the recommendation based on the archaic statistics.
All in all, consumers need to do a lot of research in seeking help or service from any agent which can really affect your property value and future price if your really plan to sell your house. Without ruling out these possibilities and taking these into account, the arguer's recommendation is not unquestionable at all. No body wants to earn less or make a bad deal.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly. need to argue:
Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. need to argue:
Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 551 350
No. of Characters: 2625 1500
No. of Different Words: 274 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.845 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.764 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.045 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.977 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 475, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[2]
Message: The adjective more is normally used with to and does not need 'more' (so called implicit comparative). Probably you need to write: 'superior to'.
Suggestion: superior to
...ons and untenable explanations. Adam is more superior than Fitch unless the arguer could provide m...
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Line 3, column 681, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguers'' or 'arguer's'?
Suggestion: arguers'; arguer's
...ents. Without those considerations, the arguers recommendation remains dubious at best....
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Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ch is more difficult to sell in a short period of time, whereas the house listed with Adam is ...
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Line 5, column 619, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: it
...most intangible factor to be considered it it depends primarily on the policy of the ...
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Line 9, column 269, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguers'' or 'arguer's'?
Suggestion: arguers'; arguer's
...ties and taking these into account, the arguers recommendation is not unquestionable at...
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Line 9, column 322, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'Nobody'?
Suggestion: Nobody
...mendation is not unquestionable at all. No body wants to earn less or make a bad deal. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, whereas, for example, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2686.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 551.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87477313975 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61986252161 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 204.123752495 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50998185118 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 833.4 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5378635192 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.090909091 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0454545455 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220456611961 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07033190962 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950068910906 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126386127809 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761806196376 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.