The article from a business magazine argues that the if the employees who needed no more than 6 hours of sleep per night will contribute more for the higher profit margins and faster growth of the company by concluding from a recent study rating of its employees
The article from a business magazine argues that the if the employees who needed no more than 6 hours of sleep per night will contribute more for the higher profit margins and faster growth of the company by concluding from a recent study rating of its employees. However, this argument is highly flawed because of the following reasons.
Firstly, the population sample of the survey may not be a representative for the entire population. The survey has been taken with only 300 people of the company including male and female. For example, there could be 3000 people working in the company and the survey could have been taken majorly from those employees who had more than 6 hours of sleep per night. Moreover, the people surveyed could have provided inaccurate information of their sleep hours per night. If either of the cases were true, the argument does not hold water.
Secondly, the article fails to provide information as to on whom the study has been conducted. The company may consists of employees who work in broad range of hours depending on their job role. The top management employees would have no need to work for long hours in the company and can leave the company with just one or two meetings and presentations. Whereas, a entry level worker would have to work for a pretty long time in the company. Hence, on whom the study has been conducted is not elucidated and hence, the argument falls apart.
Moreover, there could have been other factors in the company apart from the sleeping hours of the employees that could have resulted in the higher profit margins and faster growth of the company.For example, there could have high number of high skilled and experienced workers in the company compared to the freshers. Also, the company could have a reputable place in the market that promotes the stock buyers to buy more stocks from the company, making its growth improve. If these cases are true, then the arguments fails to be valid.
In conclusion, the study has been flawed because of these unwarranted assumptions provided by the author. Only when these assumptions can be elucidated, the argument can be found valid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 368 350
No. of Characters: 1740 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.38 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.728 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.881 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...wo meetings and presentations. Whereas, a entry level worker would have to work f...
^
Line 4, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...argins and faster growth of the company.For example, there could have high number o...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, apart from, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85558583106 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47871650635 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457765667575 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2913056117 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.823529412 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425143446852 0.218282227539 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12324477587 0.0743258471296 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.219185455621 0.0701772020484 312% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270474415776 0.128457276422 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.269400817292 0.0628817314937 428% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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