the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in many fields is by instilling them a sense of cooperation and not competition
In today's competitive world where everyone wants ti be the first in the race, without even knowing their ultimate goal, do not embrace many important values. Leadership is the quality by which various discrete groups can be united and a common goal can be reached. The issue presented states that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in many fields is by instilling them a sense of cooperation and not competition.I would strongly support this claim because of the following reasons.
First of all, effective leadership, in my view, is not about competition rather is the about how effectively a person leads his / her team without disconnecting its members. If an atmosphere of competiotion exists, there would be internal conflicts within the same group and ultimately, the goal of the group, though same may not be reached. The leader should ,maintain that the members of his/her team share mutual values and in turn , not only they improve in their individual performances but also make others improve their skills and efficiency.
Best Leader is one who makes more leaders. If competiton is the sole aim, he/she may deviate from his or her own track of bringing in divergent people to share a same cause. People learn the skills of management through their seniors or their immediate superior who has learnt and tackled many difficult situations in his journey through experienece. If he/she would think that individual promotion is the best way to improve and sustain in the company, there would be no subtle managerial skills that can be taught to his juniors and thereby, he/she ultimately causes a person to become a good leader.
Moreover, integrity is the only connects people of the society and builds it. People could do what is perceived as impossible by many by dividing the so called 'Impossible task' into small pieces of task and thereby completeing the difficult task by team building. If the members of their group strive for competition rather than cooperation, the task could never be completed and the benefits would not be reaped.
Although some people would argue that competition is the one which makes them aim high but I would say that the same can be obtained through team work and cooperation.
In conclusion, by putting forward the three reasons, I would recommend that leadership is instilled by cooperation and not competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04271356784 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73430864205 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530150753769 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9062230838 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5333333333 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277193853446 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939167284062 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146498195112 0.0758088955206 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142687669609 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127571247481 0.0667264976115 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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