In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patro

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In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.

The author presents an argument that an improvement in road projects in prunty county will
reduce the number of accidents based on the results observed by improvement of roads in Butler county five years ago. Eventhough improvement in roads is mandatory for highway safety but failing to discuss the assumptions which were considered in arriving at the argument makes it weak.

Firstly, quoting that prunty county also requires an improvement in roads like bounty fails to explain or quote the current road conditions of Prunty county. It is possible that prunty county has wide lanes and smooth surfaces already.Moreover we don' t know if the geographical or demographic conditions of both the county' s are similar. If the author would have compared the conditions of road in prunty and also the similarity of geographical conditions of both county' s it would have strengthened the argument.

Secondly, the author states the decrease in accidents in bounty is 25% in past year eventhough the roads have been expanded 5 years ago, it is possible that the roads have become very old now and surface might be rough So improvement in roads doesn't necessarily explain the exact reason for the decrease in road accidents in highways and also author fails to explain if there are any other measures taken by govenrment in decreasing the road accidents.

Finally,even if we consider both county' s are similar,the 25% decrease in accidents does not give a definitive figure of how many accidents are reduced in butler county. It is possible that the number is very less so in percentage it shows a higher value. Incase if the number of accidents in prunty is pretty high the reduction in terms of percentage may seem very less and might not be a effective method for preventing accidents.

To conclude, the author fails to provide substantial evidence thereby failing to persuade the readers in agreeing to the given argument. If the above stated statistics are compared for both the county' s and similarities are shown then the argument would have been more stronger.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ptions which were considered in arriving at the argument makes it weak. Firstl...
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Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Moreover
... wide lanes and smooth surfaces already.Moreover we don t know if the geographical or de...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
... wide lanes and smooth surfaces already.Moreover we don t know if the geographical or de...
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Line 4, column 353, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had compared'?
Suggestion: had compared
...the county s are similar. If the author would have compared the conditions of road in prunty and al...
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Line 6, column 244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: doesn't
... might be rough So improvement in roads doesnt necessarily explain the exact reason fo...
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Suggestion: , even
...ecreasing the road accidents. Finally,even if we consider both county s are simila...
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...if we consider both county s are similar,the 25% decrease in accidents does not give...
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Line 8, column 389, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
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Suggestion: an
...age may seem very less and might not be a effective method for preventing acciden...
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Line 10, column 265, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...shown then the argument would have been more stronger.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271232876712 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.186301369863 0.15541462614 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0767123287671 0.0836205057962 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0630136986301 0.0520304965353 121% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0219178082192 0.0272364105082 80% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142465753425 0.125424944231 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0630136986301 0.0416121511921 151% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.83756669499 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0191780821918 0.026700313972 72% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.109589041096 0.113004496875 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0191780821918 0.0255425247493 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00547945205479 0.0127820249294 43% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2069.0 2731.13054187 76% => OK
No of words: 344.0 446.07635468 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01453488372 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377906976744 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.261627906977 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.212209302326 0.208842608468 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136627906977 0.135150697306 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83756669499 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 207.018472906 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46511627907 0.469332199767 99% => OK
Word variations: 47.4254212192 52.1807786196 91% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.039408867 55% => OK
Sentence length: 31.2727272727 23.2022227129 135% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.3078990148 57.7814097925 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 188.090909091 141.986410481 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2727272727 23.2022227129 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.09090909091 0.724660767414 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 57.4355179704 51.9672348444 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.75757575758 1.8405768891 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344720701597 0.441005458295 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.180881264496 0.135418324435 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0984517244443 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.742262177343 0.58762219726 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135582724883 0.147661913831 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176458219377 0.193483328276 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519139476732 0.0970749176394 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.322097788679 0.42659136922 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0807334849109 0.0774707102158 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220474140098 0.312017818177 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039121974116 0.0698173142475 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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