In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
The argument presented by the author is about the accident happening in Prunty County and the reforms government has made in order to improve safety on highways. But, in contrast there have not been any changes in the situation and urges government to make changes the way Butler County has made. But, author's agrument in based on unwarranted assumptions and lack of evidence which makes this argument unconvincing.
Author cites that decrease in speed limit done by the government has not work according to their forsight. And number of accidents continue with the same rate as they were earlier. But the author has not provided any evidence on the severity of the accident. Whether the accident happening in the city are minor or major. If number of major accident has decreased and equally number of minor accidents have increased then there is surely a increase in the highway safety that they aimed for.
Furthermore, author has not provided the evidence for the number of decrease in accidents in Butler County. It can surely aks a question whether the number 25 percent is accurate or not? Or people are reporting accidents in that city? Although, increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections are very good options in order to specify more safety on highways. But, are they only reason that accident happen to be lesser than the previous five years? Maybe, people there in the city drive more heedfully.
Moreover, the fact that author has considered that the number of accidents in Prunty County has not decreased even after reducing the speed limit can doubted on criteria, Whether the accidents reported by the people are genuine or not? There can be a possibility they have reported fake accidents in order to get insurance money or any other such benefits. So the argument presented by the author is rife with holes that does not hold water.
In sum, for any argument to stand, thorough study of the cause and issue has to be done and further bolster your argument with evidence to make it more convincing. The author should have provided more evidence in order to make his/her argument strong and cogent. The lack of evidence and cursory study has made his/her argument indefensible.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1842 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.86 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.498 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.678 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reforms'' or 'reform's'?
Suggestion: reforms'; reform's
...dent happening in Prunty County and the reforms government has made in order to improve...
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Line 3, column 439, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nts have increased then there is surely a increase in the highway safety that the...
^
Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rsections are very good options in order to specify more safety on highways. But,...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, as to, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01591511936 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56570668442 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7265911207 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.55 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.85 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161539777857 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051224489782 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503143060518 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968279575204 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494480195278 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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