The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked both its economy and national identity are endangered Because illegal immigrants pose such threats every effort mu | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”

According to the prompt, the self-governance or independence of a nation is contingent upon the strength of its borders therefore illicit immigration in the country should be checked, and such immigrants should be send back to their origin country as they are the biggest threat to economy and national identity of the country. However before this argument can be properly evaluated, two specific pieces of evidence must be collected and analysed.

Firstly, whether the autonomy of a country solely dependent upon the strength of the border is unclear, and there can be several other factors that make a country autonomous. For example - If a country lacks sufficient technology - like electricity, internet etc., - then in such instances, the threat posed by illegal immigration might not be that severe in hindering the autonomy. Additionally, even if the country has the self sustaining technology but it lacks the workforce to work upon them, then in such cases it could be another factor where a country might have to depend upon other countries. If either of these scenarios has merit, then the conclusion drawn in the editorial doesn't hold water.

Secondly, what constitutes the national identity is obscure in the newspaper editorial, as the national identity in some instance can be amalgam of various people - like that in cases of India, USA etc., - if such is the case of a country then their would not be any threat to the national identity of a country as it would still be medley of people from different religion and race. If such is the case for a country then argument made in the newspaper doesn't hold water.

Thirdly, its unclear what illegal immigrants bring to the table, as the editorial just mentions them as the threat to economy, but there can be situation where the immigrants become prolific elements of the growth of the country. For instance - id the immigrants are highly educated and they are somehow ensuring the uptick in the economy then such infusion of immigrants can act as a boon, and returning them to their native country can hurt the country where they immigrated too. If such evidence comes out to be true the efforts to return them to origin state, would not make sense and thus it would weaken arguments position.

In conclusion, the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unstated assumptions. If further evidence, as stated above, are provided, and perhaps a systematic research is conducted, then it would be beneficial is assessment of argument's position.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'sent'?
Suggestion: sent
... checked, and such immigrants should be send back to their origin country as they ar...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...y and national identity of the country. However before this argument can be properly ev...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...n the conclusion drawn in the editorial doesnt hold water. Secondly, what constitut...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...try then argument made in the newspaper doesnt hold water. Thirdly, its unclear wha...
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Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'systematic research'.
Suggestion: systematic research
...stated above, are provided, and perhaps a systematic research is conducted, then it would be benefici...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03546099291 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77466052724 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470449172577 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5899961912 57.8364921388 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.846153846 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5384615385 23.324526521 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 5.70786347227 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361095943281 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125978989317 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932347921339 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198524369455 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817858628792 0.0628817314937 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments