a nation should require all of its student to study same national curriculum
Some people argue that should design a curriculum in such a way that all of its students should study same national curriculum untill they enter college, while others assert that natione should design national curriculum that allows freedom among its student to choose a curriculum that suits them best. In my opinion, I believe that national curriculum should not be rigd and stringent and it should allow its students some latitude to choose curriculum. I believe this for two reasons.
To begin with, when a national makes all of its student to study same curriculum, students donot get a lot of time in the specific area as they have to cover copious amounts of subjects. This constant meandering insidiously affects student in the long run - as they get less time to hone a particular subject. Thus most of the fundamentals ,which should have been set forth in the school, are cleared by students in college when they take a specific major. As most of time student spent clearing the basics, they eventually earn a degree with a superficial or very shallow knowledge of subject they chose in college. Today's job requirement hits such students with another blow, when cornucopia of job seekers with skills much vast than those who have shalllow knowledge enter this competitive race. Only if such student are given a base to develop skills from the early days can make it possible for students to focus more on profound study's in their college days.
Secondly, overburden which raft amount of courses in national curriculum imposes upon students makes it harder for them to develop extra skills. Constant pressure of getting good marks in all the academic subjects makes it harder for them to build skills that alleviate the overall personality. For instance - constant pressure of teachers, home and friends can make it harder for students to give them selves few hours free in which they can do PT, take swimming lessons or just talk with others and develop social skills. These perniciously harms the students once they enter college where lack of social skills and several extra curricular skills makes them feel as an outsider. Moreover, student become so diffident sometimes that they drop out when they aren't able to survive such environment in college. When amass of focus from a very young age is given into development of interpersonal and social skills, it makes it makes it easier for students to not percieve them as maladjusted. This can happen only when courses are less rigid and freedom is given to students to spend time other than just in academics.
On the other hand, some people say that having a common curriculum gives student more time to choose an area of study, they posist that student by these curriculum are able to choose a suit that better suits their requirement in the college. But these people don't consider the fact that in this advancing age of technology where internet and mobiles phones had given us profound knowledge and nurtured a lot of intellect and precocious students relying just on curriculum is too obsolete thinking. Thus only less stringent courses and freedom to choose subject can nurture student's overall developement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, of course, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2653.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 532.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98684210526 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53049753573 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468045112782 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7479710264 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.631578947 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361507465116 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116724747028 0.0831039109588 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150638349211 0.0758088955206 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261821331337 0.150359130593 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1839375513 0.0667264976115 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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