“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
Author's conclusion, every effort must be made to deport them (illegal immigrants) to their country of origin is based on the premise that illegal immigrants are the ones endangering the economy and national identity. Before the authors argument to be considered as flawless, there are some assumptions which needs to be taken in consideration while evaluating the argument. This essay points out three of these assumptions.
Firstly, author is assuming that illegal immigrants are responsible for the downfall of nations economy and identity. It may be possible that the country is in a conflict with another country as a result of which we can observe the strain of conflct on economy. It may also be possible that conflict is a controversial one which drawing lot of attention from other big players who can affect the economy and the position of country as whole. Authors need to provide an evidence to clear out this assumption. If this scenario is possible then it weakens the argument.
Secondly, author is assuming, immigrants come from crossing the borders illegally. It may be possible that the majority of the immigrants are coming through a verified way and are not illegally entering the country. It may also be possible that the people whom author is calling illegal immigrants are actually native tribes of that country who are just not registered in the database as the citizens. Author needs to clear this assumption by some evidence (perhaps a survey). If authors fails to clear out the assumption, then it makes the argument weak.
In conclusion, authors argument contains many holes which needs to be filled before it can be considered for evaluation. If author is able to clear out the assumptions then it
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 286 350
No. of Characters: 1413 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.112 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.686 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.782 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...onomy and national identity. Before the authors argument to be considered as flawless, ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ints out three of these assumptions. Firstly, author is assuming that illegal...
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Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... evidence to clear out this assumption. If this scenario is possible then it weake...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssible then it weakens the argument. Secondly, author is assuming, immigrants...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., then it makes the argument weak. In conclusion, authors argument contains...
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Line 8, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re it can be considered for evaluation. If author is able to clear out the assumpt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 286.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05944055944 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78040630141 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475524475524 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.435137147 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4666666667 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0666666667 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224829067006 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811423522427 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991591767412 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152504571307 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800747061056 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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