The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.
In the recent newspaper editorial, it is stated that the nation must make every possible ways to return the illegal immigrants to their country as they poses threats. This conclusion is based on the evidence that are insufficient and therefore more information are required to analyze the viability of the assertion.
Firstly, the author assumes that the country's autonomy as the foremost importance. In other words, there are no any issues much crucial than it's autonomy. For instance, it might be the case that some country's economy lies below poverty line and it's populace might have been facing famine and affliction. Also, in the developing nations, the country's development might be of major concern rather than the possible threats by the immigrants. If any of these above mentioned scenarios have merit then the argument's caim falls apart. So, more information regarding the country is necessary so that we can have better understanding of the situation.
Similarly, the author assumes that amount and resources required in order to prevent the immigrants are futile and the possible threat by these immigrants are much more severe. For instance, the immigrants might be the refugees and they are compelled to do illegally in order to save their family and they might have no mal-intention fpr the country. If this is the case, then goverment should try to provide them food and shelter rather than returning them to their country. Therefore, more information about the type of immigrants, their reasons to do so and their origin needs to be researched prior to make any decision.
At last, the author assumes that there are no other causes of threats from other sources besides the illegal immigrants. For instance, there might be other factors that adversely affect the autonomy of the country. Also, the root causes of the violence and threat might be within the country rather than from the foreign country. So, the inside causes of the threats needs to be considered and the information regarding the same is very essential to determine the merit of the assertion.
In sum, the argument as a whole is based on numerous unwarranted assumptions and the evidence provided are inadequate. More information in the form of systematic research is required in order to check the practicability of the contention as mentioned above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1921 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.016 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.681 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.183 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'pose'
Suggestion: pose
...gal immigrants to their country as they poses threats. This conclusion is based on th...
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Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uthor assumes that the countrys autonomy as the foremost importance. In other wor...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...t importance. In other words, there are no any issues much crucial than its autono...
^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... its autonomy. For instance, it might be the case that some countrys economy lies...
^^
Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the possible threats by the immigrants. If any of these above mentioned scenarios ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, regarding, similarly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13315926893 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75444173291 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462140992167 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3933573802 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.222222222 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227567046057 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691926973286 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484225737308 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122071764563 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052180495055 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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