"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The claim supports that in Balmer island, the kind of transportation used are mopeds and, as the population increases during the summer months, the town council decided to limit the number of mopeds rented during this season. By limiting the number of rentals, the council believes that will attain the 50 percent annual reduction of accidents, similar achievement by seavilles's town which enforced same limits of rentals. Nevertheless, the statement presents some dubious questions which needs to be discussed.
According to what is said, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months and for this reason, to decrease the number of accidents, the rental mopeds companies will suffered a reduction. In the other hand, it is not explained the relation between the increase of population during summer and the number of accidents. The number of accidents could happen for several reasons, such as the lack of instructions saying the best ways to drive a moped, or absense of laws and rules for this kind of transportation.
The second point is the comparison between Balmer island and Seaville's town. One of the reasons that the council recommended this solution is because the neighboard island enforced the same limits on moped rentals. However, it is not explained if this was the only solution which the town did. Also, the author said that they did similar limits. So, this recommendation is not perfectly accurate. The neighboring island could have endorsed multiple solutions instead of the limitation of rentals, such as restraint the speed limit, and hours per day the population should drive the mopets.
Furthermore, regarding the comparison between both towns, the author did not mentioned the number of population. Definetely, towns that are more populated have more probability to happen accidents. For example, if you compare Sao Paulo (Brazil) and Buenos Aires (Argentina), the population is 12 million and 3 million, respectively. surely the number of accidents in Sao Paulo is higher than Buenos Aires . For this reason, the analogy between Balmer island and Seaville is not correct.
Therefore, the reccomendation of Balmer island's council to reduce the moped rental during summer is not appropriate. better solutions could be authorized and surely would have better results regarding the improvement of accident's numbers. Besides, this solutions would not only improve the number of accidents in summer, but others seasons too.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 2021 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.209 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.906 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.328 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'suffer'
Suggestion: suffer
...dents, the rental mopeds companies will suffered a reduction. In the other hand, it is n...
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Line 4, column 78, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
... between both towns, the author did not mentioned the number of population. Definetely, t...
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Line 4, column 330, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Surely
...12 million and 3 million, respectively. surely the number of accidents in Sao Paulo is...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 401, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...in Sao Paulo is higher than Buenos Aires . For this reason, the analogy between Ba...
^^
Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Better
...ental during summer is not appropriate. better solutions could be authorized and surel...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 249, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...rovement of accidents numbers. Besides, this solutions would not only improve the nu...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, therefore, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34536082474 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80313651036 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497422680412 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.8259346274 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.7 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375094353823 0.218282227539 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110272426715 0.0743258471296 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11526297526 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210765170774 0.128457276422 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633260400232 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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