The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
The argument proposes a conclusion by the observation of Dr. Field, which says that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather by their biological parents. But, children talk more about their parents than others adults in the village. However, according to the author, he disagrees saying that the approach is invalid and his approach would be better to understand child-rearing tradition and others cultures.
First, the conclusion of the anthropologist is not completely accurate because a study of this type cannot be concluded only by observation. It is necessary to live among this village to have better conclusions. An anthropologist, to have better arguments, need to study for months, or sometimes even years to have a valid conclusion about a civilization.
For example, an psychologist must study months and see weekly a patient to have an accurate conclusion about him.
According to the author, the interview-centered method that his team of graduate students is using in Tertia a much more accurate conclusion. Which can be immediately invalided, because, as it is explained before, a conclusion about some culture is much more profound and difficult to understand. It is essential to study months and live among the culture to truly understand how they live and what are their costumes, traditions and beliefs.
Children could be reared by the village’s civilization, because children had some activities to do outdoor. However this observation do not conclude that inside their houses, parents talk, educate their children. For instance, in Middle Age, low-income families had to put their children to work in order to help their family to survive. And this was not a excuse for them to forget about their parents and only talk about adults that they see in the streets or spend more time.
Therefore, a better study living among the Turtia population could weaken both arguments, from Dr. Karp and Dr. Field. The best way to study and really understand culture, behavior, and beliefs is living or spending much more time with people from this particular place.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1711 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.047 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.805 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.902 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.602 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 14, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...on about a civilization. For example, an psychologist must study months and see ...
^^
Line 8, column 109, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...dren had some activities to do outdoor. However this observation do not conclude that i...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 356, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eir family to survive. And this was not a excuse for them to forget about their p...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22713864307 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9245254912 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510324483776 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7635158447 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 110.75 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101986323596 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361062167289 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581768018312 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0677580311418 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579432911399 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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