"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The author makes several unstated assumptions and hence, is not well reasoned. While it may be true that accidents are increasing on Balmer Island during the summer season, this author's unsubstantiated argument utterly fails to weave a cogent case to prove it.
Firstly, the majority of accidents aren't caused by the increasing number of vehicles but when then traffic rules aren't being implemented by the populace. Therefore, there might be a probability that the accidents are increasing in Balmer Island due to the remission of traffic rules by the people. There might not be traffic police and so the people are violating the traffic rules by driving with hazardous speed and eventually causing accidents. Therefore, it might be a blunder to impute the accidents to an increasing number of mopeds without checking the above-stated possibility.
Secondly, there is a necessity to point out about the condition of the roads. Pedestrians should walk either on the footpath or they have to use the zebra crossing to cross the roads. There might be a possibility of not having footpath on the roads on which people can walk. In addition to this, there may be a possibility that zebra crossing has faded out and so the people might be crossing roads at some dangerous places. It is therefore a necessity to check the condition of the roads than reducing the moped rentals limit.
Thirdly, there must be more number of speed breakers to avoid accidents. There could be a possibility of only few speed breakers on the roads. The speed breakers are the very essential thing on the roads that control the speed of the mopeds thereby reducing the accidents involving mopeds and people. It might be a drawback of the town council for not establishing the more number of speed breakers and inturn for not checking them during the summer season.
In recapitulation, the author makes several unaddressed assumptions that gravely undermines its tenability. Unless these underlying assumptions are addressed the argument falls apart, and the conclusion that limiting the rentals of moped would reduce accidents could be flawed.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 349 350
No. of Characters: 1738 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.322 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.98 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.011 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.616 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
... are increasing on Balmer Island during the summer season, this authors unsubstantiated argument ...
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Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
.... Firstly, the majority of accidents arent caused by the increasing number of vehi...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...of vehicles but when then traffic rules arent being implemented by the populace. Ther...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 440, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...and inturn for not checking them during the summer season. In recapitulation, the author makes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12968299712 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78560335968 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466858789625 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2511424471 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.705882353 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204874955417 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066199073163 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665575133958 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110060160768 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033758817235 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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