We recommend that Monarch Books open a caf in its store Monarch having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects Clearly opening the caf w

Essay topics:

"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The argument makes a number of unwarranted assumptions regarding opening a cafe in Monarch Books. Taken as a whole, these unwarranted assumptions render argument highly suspect. Indeed, if the unstated assumptions do not hold true, then the argument totally falls apart.

The argument assumes that opening a cafe in Monarch Books would attract customers as it states Monarch Books has a large customer base. Establishing a cafe might be attractive, but there is a necessity to think about the squander that would be engendered at that place. When the milieu of the book store is filled with rubbish it will be unable to attract the large customer base Monarch Books has. On the other hand, the cafe needs to play some mellifluous music but it might be perturbing the customers who are searching for books.

Another unstated assumption the argument assumes is that the space for cafe can be allocated by discontinuing the children's book section and the reason for discontinuing is children's section will be less popular since the national census indicated a decline in the people under age ten. The children under age ten in the nation may be declining, however, the argument didn't present the statistics of children population of the area where Monarch Books is running. It may be contingent that pivotal profit for the Monarch Book store may be coming from the children section. Unless the argument can show that there is decline in the population of children under age ten in the area where Monarch Books is present, the recommendation would be useless.

Another pivotal error the argument makes is opening a cafe in Monarch Books can attract more customers and better vie with the Regel Books which recently opened a cafe. Regel Books may have opened a cafe but the argument does not provide the information on whether Regel Books have attracted its more customers than it had hitherto. In order to efface this ambiguity, the argument should provide the before and after customer base of Regel Books.

The argument makes a number of unstated assumptions that seriously undermine its validity. Unless these assumptions are addressed the argument falls apart, and the recommendation that opening a cafe in Monarch Books would attract more customers could be flawed.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...but there is a necessity to think about the squander that would be engendered at that place....
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...that would be engendered at that place. When the milieu of the book store is filled ...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...may be declining, however, the argument didnt present the statistics of children popu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0935828877 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6689113121 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433155080214 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0076126102 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0625 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267362424939 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110629477772 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877398970767 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164114299349 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735989091598 0.0628817314937 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1865 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.973 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.291 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.656 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5