We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following recommendation from the board of director of Monarch book. Author had drawn conclusion that opening cafe will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal book, which recently opened its own cafe.There are several assumption made by author. before the recommendation come into an exist, let us look in to the given arguments.
Director of Monarch book recommend that books open cafe in its store.book store having business at same location for more than twenty years, and has a large customer base because of it is known for its wide selection on book on all subject. In next statement, author made assumption that opening cafe would attract more customer. There are several think to attract customer for buying book. if store sell book with attractive discounts in store then customer easily attract.
Author stated that, space could be made for the cafe by discontinuing the childeren's book section which become less popular given that the most recent national census. national sensus
indicated significant decline in percentage of population under age ten. This declination of percentage consider on the basis of national census and not for specific Monarch book store.It might possible that Monarch book located near to school. children age group below ten, prefer an Monarch book to buy educational book. out of total student of school, at least half of children may prefer Monarch book. so, profit percentage of monarch book also increase.
Lastly, Author had made comparision between Monarch book and Regal book. Regal book may be located near to railway station, so the customer requirement may vary. customers may vary, there requirement may vary. There is no comparision to be made in between them.
To sum up with all, for strenthening argument, author need to consider several factor.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 298 350
No. of Characters: 1504 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.155 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.047 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.563 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.625 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.417 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.696 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.164 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...ook, which recently opened its own cafe.There are several assumption made by author. ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
... recently opened its own cafe.There are several assumption made by author. before the recommendati...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...y opened its own cafe.There are several assumption made by author. before the recommendati...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
... are several assumption made by author. before the recommendation come into an exist, ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...or. before the recommendation come into an exist, let us look in to the given arguments....
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and has a large customer base because of it is known for its wide selection on bo...
^^
Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'severals'?
Suggestion: severals
... would attract more customer. There are several think to attract customer for buying bo...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...nk to attract customer for buying book. if store sell book with attractive discoun...
^^
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nk to attract customer for buying book. if store sell book with attractive discoun...
^^
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: National
...n that the most recent national census. national sensus indicated significant decline i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 186, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...and not for specific Monarch book store.It might possible that Monarch book locate...
^^
Line 6, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...at Monarch book located near to school. children age group below ten, prefer an Monarch ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 283, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...l. children age group below ten, prefer an Monarch book to buy educational book. o...
^^
Line 6, column 324, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Out
...n Monarch book to buy educational book. out of total student of school, at least ha...
^^^
Line 6, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...lf of children may prefer Monarch book. so, profit percentage of monarch book also...
^^
Line 8, column 163, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Customers
..., so the customer requirement may vary. customers may vary, there requirement may vary. T...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 72, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: 'several factors'.
Suggestion: several factors
...ening argument, author need to consider several factor.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, look, may, so, then, at least, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 296.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60548110241 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564189189189 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.4251666551 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3333333333 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4444444444 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445139407577 0.218282227539 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138705629543 0.0743258471296 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160043630176 0.0701772020484 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206914086935 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166737725328 0.0628817314937 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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