The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of bargin brand cereals.author drawn conclusion that, success in selling of cereal, so Bargain Brand now expand its business and begin marketing other low priced food product as quickly as possible. Before the memo to be implemented, let's look into given arguments.
Firstly, Author give an information of introduction first product at Bargain Brand breakfast cereal which introduced one year before. next immediately, author had made assumption that, due to only low price may brought customers attracted to words Bargain Brand rather than prefer to top selling cereal companies. author may need to as question is really Bargain Brand had got popularity? Within one year what's major attractive style they prefer so that people attracted. It some what agreeably that low price may attract the people, but whether they really maintain cleanness, regulation provided by government in their restaurant
so that customer may happy.
secondly, Author made strong assumption that Top brand companies follows their strategy to lower their prices and also several plan to introduce their own budgt.
Top brands who were existed from years ago, also have got fame, so whether they really prefer strategy to lower thier product price.and nextly author explain so
that no once have needed to raise our prices to continue to making profit.Whether really study person category, location of top restaurant and bargin brand restaurant. If bargin brand restaurant located near to station, people who prefer cereal in some less cost, and another top restaurant who were rich area, people who came their for client meeting. so their not suitable comparision between them.
Thirdly, author recommend that, success in terms of profit,which may leads to bargin brand to expand its business and begin marketing other low priced food product as quickly as possible. Even though success achived for specific cereal, whether this success may hold true for all other product. even though they may fail if blindly go through for marketing product.
To sum up with all, author may need to ask question to strengthen the given arguments.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 18 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1782 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.121 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.407 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.161 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.708 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Next
...ereal which introduced one year before. next immediately, author had made assumption...
^^^^
Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...prefer to top selling cereal companies. author may need to as question is really Barga...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...and had got popularity? Within one year whats major attractive style they prefer so t...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 476, Rule ID: SOME_WHAT_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhat' (=slightly)?
Suggestion: somewhat
...hey prefer so that people attracted. It some what agreeably that low price may attract th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...aurant so that customer may happy. secondly, Author made strong assumption that Top...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 120, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun plan seems to be countable; consider using: 'several plans'.
Suggestion: several plans
...strategy to lower their prices and also several plan to introduce their own budgt. Top bran...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oduct price.and nextly author explain so that no once have needed to raise our pr...
^^^
Line 8, column 75, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whether
...our prices to continue to making profit.Whether really study person category, location ...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 354, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ople who came their for client meeting. so their not suitable comparision between ...
^^
Line 10, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...commend that, success in terms of profit,which may leads to bargin brand to expand its...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 296, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...ss may hold true for all other product. even though they may fail if blindly go thro...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.6327345309 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 346.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31213872832 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.565119676 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552023121387 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.9845583362 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.533333333 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0666666667 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290377300268 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933526726984 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770598991882 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120469238073 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642089969059 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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