A ten year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent Another study however | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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A ten-year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets, whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent. Another study, however,

The following issue appeared in health news letter. The author had point out the issue with the help of two study's which carried out by nation wide. Even though the theory attempt up to the mark, there are to be question which ask by author before taking into consideration. So, point out the question from given health newsletter.

It's considerable point which author put in front, so an nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing helmet increase from 35 percentage to 80 percentage. Even though, percentage my shown increasing graph, whether population rate ever taken into consideration. before 10 year people who buy bicycle are rare. and at current situation from 35 percent to 80 percent. In this ten year, was government certain rule for an bicycle. If rider who ride vehicle pay an certain amount of fine so for that fear people may use to wear people.

Another study shows that even though wearing of helmet, accident cause by bicycling increased 200 percent. The bicyclist feel safer because they are wearing helmet. is just wearing of helmet may prevent from accident? There are several thing, whether bicyclist really take training. It's not only problem of bicyclist there are several other reason present. Such as bicycle tier, it's break, seat.Tier are so slippery for applying break so they injury to bicyclist. if this thing repetitive manner, whether residential complaints to an bicycle company or give any suggestion for improvement.

Government strive held to reduce number of serious injuries from bicycle accidents by launching education program that concentrate on the factor other than helmet usage that are necessary for bicycle safety. what are question to be asked to bicyclist, and even though whether they are giving an solution to the given problems.

So to sum up with all, author may need to ask question before making any conclusion .

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ion rate ever taken into consideration. before 10 year people who buy bicycle are rare...
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...et may prevent from accident? There are several thing, whether bicyclist really take training...
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...revent from accident? There are several thing, whether bicyclist really take training...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, really, so, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13680781759 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62082579792 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592833876221 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2175024088 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.85 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.35 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.95 5.70786347227 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250278616701 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754027446302 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795225946324 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116350839018 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951085656921 0.0628817314937 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.94 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, really, so, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments