Benton City residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. During those ten years, l

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Benton City residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. During those ten years, local sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol, have increased fourfold, while sales of sulia, a food rarely eaten by the healthiest residents, have declined dramatically. Because of these positive changes in the eating habits of Benton City residents, we predict that the obesity rate in the city will soon be well below the national average.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

The author states that the citizens of the Benton city adopted healthier lifestyle. he make this assertions based upon the survey results, which shows that people follow dietary recommendation provided by the government and the consumption of the health beneficial food products such as kiran is increasing, but the food products which is bad for health-sullan is decreasing. upon outer inspection, the author assertation seems plausible, but upon the closer inspection, the given argument is based upon the several baseless assumptions. For better evaluation of the given argument, the author needs to provide more pieces of evidence, so that the reliability of the given argument can be increased.

Firstly, the author needs to provide more information about the survey. The author needs to answer to the questions such as, what is the sample size? if the sample size is very low then the correct prdiction can not be made. furthermore, does sample includes people of all the age group? if the sample only includes a particular age group, then the reliability of survey is low. Also, it might be possible that survey is carried out among few healthier people, if this is true then the generalizaton based upon this survey is a great mistake to predict a result based upon this survey.

Secondly, the author needs to provide more information about the dietary nutritional recommendations of the government ten years ago and present. if the dietary recommendations of ten years ago are more strict and rigid, but now are simple, then it might be possible that the people of ten years ago are more healthier than today. it might be true that people who have MBR 45-50 as heathier people ten years ago, but now BMR of 30-60 are consider as a healthy people then the results may alters.

Last but not least, the author needs to provide more information about the nature of the food products- kiran and sullan. The author states that the sells of the kiran increases, so people are more healthier. however, it might be possible that the kiran though reduced the cholesterol, but is bad for health. furthermore, the author states that the sells of the sullan is reduced, however, it might be possible that the sullan is actually beneficial for health, though only few healthier people eat, it doesn't mean that the product is bad for health. people may not like the taste of the product,as a result, only few of them eat it regualarly.

In a nutshell, the author makes a impetuous recommendations based upon the numerous baseless assumptions. For the greater realibility of the given argument, the author needs to provide more specific pieces of evidence (perhaps, based upon systematic research study) so that the validity of the given argument can be improved.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99349240781 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75559455796 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.399132321041 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1065765194 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.1 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.05 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140390154621 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519193211596 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066903690979 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815494536377 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692141170263 0.0628817314937 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2238 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.834 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.639 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.845 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.417 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.638 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5