The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
From the beginning of time, collaboration helped us survive and flourish as a species. I strongly agree with the statement and argue that the ability to work in a team is a very precious skill to attain and a much more critical element than the competition. In this essay, I will develop my argument, basing it on two main reasons.
First of all, the majority of institutions nowadays value and even require the prospect graduates to be able to work well with their peers. For instance, I was researching a plethora of job opportunities and found out that ninety percent of employers have this point as a primary requirement. More specifically, in investment banking, even though there is a highly competitive atmosphere, the only way to attain high peaks is by relying on your colleagues. Usually, in the morning, all the employees sit at the table and discuss the main transaction that should be done, and the complexity of the process increases if not being done in complete synergy. The point afore-mentioned illustrates the idea that nowadays the majority of industries' employees perform their jobs in teams even though competition persists.
Secondly, by instilling a sense of cooperation, we eliminate the effect of "putting a stick in the wheel" of your teammate. In other words, society should be educated in a way that no one impedes someone's else success even though this would put yourself on a higher ladder. For example, a trivial school project demands pupils to work in groups, but usually, the job is done individually, and everybody puts effort for their own benefit, not for the teams as a whole. One might say that this is a good idea, as everybody will perform at their maximum capabilities, and the project will be accomplished successfully. However, these situations bring problems like "lack of delegation" or "working on the same points twice and neglecting other". But the most important detrimental part is that students might impede the performance of others so that his job is put in a better light. The elements above show that if there is a lack of cooperation spirit, competition portraits a devastating effect.
One might say that competition is the main driver of society. However, we would have never succeeded as human beings if we have not cooperated in the first place. We used to hunt together and protect each other from other predators. If the only competition were in place, I would not be writing right now this essay.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, for instance, first of all, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02644230769 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03698444958 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552884615385 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0105249311 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.052631579 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8947368421 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0852387943875 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0237409744095 0.0743258471296 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299381361388 0.0701772020484 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0445521679212 0.128457276422 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286839956863 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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