“Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This discovery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in style: molds could be used only for life-size sculptures. It also explains why few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in value.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author in the argument suggests that the life size sculptures in the island of kali have used life size molds rather than sculpting tools and techniques and thus, these sculpture will lose the value while the miniature sculptures increasing their values. The argument when looked at a superficial level seems plausible and intuitive. The underlying assumptions of the author are that the molds found have been used to create the sculptures, and that such usage of molds will decrease their value. However to arrive at the final conclusion that the author conveys, there are several queries that the critical analyser of this argument may come across, mainly due to the ambiguities in the author's assupmtions. answering to these queries would provide more clarifications on these underlying assumption, hence paving way for a better evaluation of the argument.
The author's main argument is that since the life sized sculptures have used mmolds, their value would be reduced in the market. Here the author fails to consider several other factors that determine the value of a sculpture. For example the collectors may be keen on the number of sculpture that are remaining from that era. if there are only few of them are available, the collectors would still value them at high prices. Another query to make is the historical importance of these sculptures. The sculptures may be valued for their historical importance rather than the technique with which they were made. In such a case too, the value of the sculptures may not be reduced, which would severly underming the underlying assumptions of the author, and hence the conclusion.
Now let's consider the fact that the collectors actually valued the technique of the sculpting. In such a case, if the molds were used to make the sculptures it would devalue the life size sculptures. But the author fails to provide satisfactory evidence linking the molds to the life size sculpture. For example, it would be worthwhile to query about the datings of the sculptures and the molds. if the sculpture predate way back than the molds, the link would between the molds and the sculptures would be very weak. In such a case, it would be more telling of the sculpting prowess of the ancient Kalinese artists and their techniques, which would be contradictory to the conclusion of the author.
The collectors might value the dating of the sculptures. if the life size sculptures predates the miniature sculptures in a significant manner, the collectors would still value the former over the latter. thus it would be worthwhile to query the dating of the sculpture; to which historic era they belong, which would shed more light on the matter.
Before arriving at the conclusion of the author, it would be worthhile to query the interest among the collectors in miniature sculptures. For example, the collectors may assign higher values for sculptures with large sizes. In such a case, no matter the technique used, the life sized sculptures would be highly valuated as opposed to the miniature sculptures. this would call for serious revaluation of the argument and the final conclusion.
The author in this argument have overlooked several key areas that affect the final conclusion significantly. providing answers to the queries presented above would help clarify the argument and more accurate evaluation of the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2772 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.004 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 85 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.506 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.397 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...al level seems plausible and intuitive. The underlying assumptions of the author ar...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...age of molds will decrease their value. However to arrive at the final conclusion that ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Answering
...ambiguities in the authors assupmtions. answering to these queries would provide more cla...
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Suggestion: If
...pture that are remaining from that era. if there are only few of them are availabl...
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... author, and hence the conclusion. Now lets consider the fact that the collectors a...
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Suggestion: If
...atings of the sculptures and the molds. if the sculpture predate way back than the...
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Suggestion: If
...ght value the dating of the sculptures. if the life size sculptures predates the m...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a significant manner" with adverb for "significant"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tures predates the miniature sculptures in a significant manner, the collectors would still value the f...
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Suggestion: Thus
...still value the former over the latter. thus it would be worthwhile to query the dat...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
...still value the former over the latter. thus it would be worthwhile to query the dat...
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Suggestion:
...h large sizes. In such a case, no matter the technique used, the life sized sculp...
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Suggestion: This
...as opposed to the miniature sculptures. this would call for serious revaluation of t...
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Suggestion: Providing
...ect the final conclusion significantly. providing answers to the queries presented above ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, however, if, look, may, still, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2828.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10469314079 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74086640602 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.391696750903 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 875.7 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8768697404 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.740740741 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5185185185 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85185185185 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116675345456 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415800299057 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430272353876 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711168090993 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269952787319 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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