The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
human kind have been on the planet earth for several thousand years. In this stay humans have defeated many obstacles, challenges and have undoubtedly achieved superiority over other living organisms. For this, the natural instict of competition have been instrumental. Furthermore, due to the relative intelligence of the humans, humans learned quickly how to compete with other species for food, shelter, authority etc. thus one cannot deny the value of being competitve. it has served the human kind immensely through out their history. However, humans have achieved great civilization in their long journey up until now. this change in nature of the huuman kind calls for new qualities that become significant over the others. one such trait is cooperativeness. Actually cooperativeness too benefited the human kind in their life long journey. one could argue that the intense corporativeness that gave the extra edge for humans in the early years of the earth in the race for the dominance. To employ successful competition, humans have used cooperation intelligently. The knowledge on prehistoric eras where we find great cooperation and coordination among human settlements bears evidence to it. thus one could see that cooperation and competition are two components of human quality that served humans dearly, but cooperation is important and serves as a foundation fro successful competition. it is comming from this general argument that I agree that the best way for a society to prepare the yonger generation is instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The importance of competition for development of skill is undeniable, even at present times. many systems that involve in skill development, be the schools, universities, sport academies and likes, have some competition component attached in their programmes. schools have award programmes for students whow score highest marks in exams, sport academies give awards for students who perform well in tournements they organise. this serves as a motivating factor for skill development. but this may not be the case when you are a leader out there in the society. Though you need continual development, you may not have as abundandent chances of mock competitions for you as you had as a student. development as an adult heavily depend upon cooperation. Studies have shown that at the later ages of your life, it is the emotional intelligence that makes one successful-which involes cooperation, than absolute intelligence-which involves competition. people which high accolades and awards, and not being able to work with other people would serve very little as an leader since leadership calls for the ability to collaberate, unite and compromise, rather than individual glory. In this sense one would see the significant of nurturing the young generation with a sense of corporation rather than competition.
A nation consist of people with different ideologies, different ethnicities and different backgrounds. A leader, may it be political or any other proffessional field, are likely to encounter these different cross sections of the society. In such a situation, he/she should be able to get the best out of them, despite their differences. In such instance, competition would serve no good, and the skill to be cooperative would serve best for a leader.
A nation should focus on delivering their young with the message of cooperation rather than competition. competition is just a transitory skill needed to develep skill and allows for refinement. Larger part of ones life would be the aftermath of these development and refinement, and this part would be the most crucial part for the nation as awhole for development. A sense of corpaoration is the key factor needed in a leader, not competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 46.0 12.9106741573 356% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3196.0 2235.4752809 143% => OK
No of words: 599.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33555926544 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14468022019 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502504173623 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1010.7 704.065955056 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7333233298 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8484848485 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1515151515 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0303030303 5.21951772744 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270469827591 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649708304681 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711167999437 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154981123615 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285010720152 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 100.480337079 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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